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In a short story “The Legend of Maria Auxilio from Ease L.A.” by Rita Oregon, Maria is a strong-willed Indian woman. She endures enormous pains in her past life, yet she has never given up. In addition, she manages to raise six young children and has them all attended school. One day Maria is visited by a man named Angel Callido, or Fallen Angel, who has come to offer her a wish. Maria declines the wish because she is satisfied with her current life. The Fallen Angel enters her soul to find her weakness, but all he could find are the pains she has been endured which even him cannot bear. In the story, the central conflict surrounds Maria as she’s confronting the Fallen Angel. Each character has different role to represent such as the Fallen Angel represents Maria’s dark conscience. Furthermore, there are some subtle messages Auxilio wants to send to reader about life of a woman.

Central conflict is very important to a story. The purpose of everything in a story is to support central conflict. As we learn about the characters in “The Legend of Maria Auxilio from Ease L.A.”, we begin to understand the central conflict. We feel more for Maria’s situation. Maria, a woman sold torillas on the corner of Brooklyn and Soto in East L.A., who has always been endured the pain from her past. She works hard to raise her six children, and she is trying to go after her dream, having a house of her own. As she is confronting the Fallen Angel, he offers her a wish. The central conflict of the story is when Maria denies her wish. She is fighting against her greediness. She could’ve wished for money or anything, but she chooses nothing. Therefore, this story’s central conflict is Maria versus her conscience. Without the central conflict, there is no story. There will be a few characters talking to each other or running around, but no story.

Oregon develops characters very carefully. Each character represents different role in the story. First of all, Maria is a woman with troubled past. In her life, she has gone through a lot historical events. Her first husband and her son died in the Revolucion. She has been a slave. Yet she has not given up. She is still taking good care of her children. She represents a noble mother figure. The Fallen Angel on the other hand, represents a devil. He wants to trick Maria into greedy, but he cannot because Maria’s life experience overwhelms him. He wants to take away the nobility of Maria. Lastly, the narrator is a third person narrator. He symbolizes someone who feels sympathize for Maria’s situation and what she has been through. Oregon never gives her narrator a clear identity, but from his tone, he should know Maria quiet well.

There is a lot of meaning behind this story. Oregon wants to send to reader that women can endure a lot of pains more than men such as laboring or carrying a baby. In addition, Oregon also tells us not to be greedy. For example, if Maria agreed to make a wish, then the Fallen Angel would have succeeded corrupting Maria. Maria is smart to realize she there is nothing for free. Lastly, Oregon’s message is that we should not give up our live under any circumstances. We have to endure to live, and we should live up our dream.

In the story “The Legend of Maria Auxilio from Ease L.A.”, shows us that each of individual has different background. Some people are lucky to have good lives, and there are others who are not. We should protect and help one another in time of distress. We should not look down upon people who below us. Their live stories might have overwhelmed us.
Tran4gaIn a short story “The Legend of Maria Auxilio from Ease L.A.” by Rita Oregon, Maria is a strong-willed Indian woman. (It would be better to introduce the heroine like that : ...Orgen , the protagonist , Maris , .. is such & such ) She endures enormous pains in her past life, yet she has never given up ( she endured ..., yet has never given up : no need to repeat she ) . In addition, she manages to raise six young children and has them all attended school. One day, Maria is visited by a man named Angel Callido, or Fallen Angel, who has come to offer her a wish( a man named Callido or .. visits Maria to offer her ... ). Maria declines the wish because she is satisfied with her current life. The Fallen Angel enters her soul to find her weakness, but all he could find are (were) the pains she has been endured which even him cannot bear ( the pains she has endured , which even him would not bear ) . In the story, the central conflict surrounds Maria as she’s confronting ( as she confronts ) the Fallen Angel. Each character has different role to represent such as the Fallen Angel represents Maria’s dark conscience. ( It is important to use punctuation marks for better understanding : ...to represent. The fallen angel , for instance , represents ...) Furthermore, there are some subtle messages Auxilio wants to send to reader about life of a woman. ( ...send the reader about the life of a woman )

The Central conflict is very important to a story. The purpose of everything in a story is to support the central conflict. As we learn about the characters in “The Legend of Maria Auxilio from Ease L.A.” , we begin to understand the central conflict. We feel more for Maria’s situation. Maria, a woman sold (who sells) torillas on the corner of Brooklyn and Soto in East L.A., who has always been endured (has always endured) the pain from her past ( through her past life ) . She works hard to raise her six children, and she is trying to go after her dream : having a house of her own. As she is confronting the Fallen Angel, he offers her a wish.(no need for this repetition here ) The central conflict of the story is (occurs) when Maria denies her wish. She is fighting against her greediness. She could’ve wished for money or anything, but she chooses nothing. Therefore, this story’s central conflict is Maria versus her conscience. Without the central conflict, there is no story. There will be a few characters talking to each other or running around, but no story.

Oregon develops characters very carefully. Each character represents different role in the story. First of all, Maria is a woman with (a) troubled past. In her life, she has gone through a lot (of) historical events. Her first husband and her son died (has died : try to be consistent concerning tenses ) in the Revolucion. She has been a slave, yet she has not given up. She is still taking good care of her children. She represents a noble mother figure. The Fallen Angel ,on the other hand, represents a devil. He wants to trick Maria into greedy (greediness), but he cannot ( either use short form or long ones can't\cannot , he's \ he is ) because Maria’s life experience overwhelms him. He wants to take away the nobility of Maria ( Maria's nobility ). Lastly, the narrator is a third person narrator. He symbolizes someone who feels sympathize (feels sympathy for \ sympathizes with ) for Maria’s situation and what she has been through. Oregon never gives her narrator a clear identity, but from his tone, he should know Maria quiet well \ quite Emotion: smile .

There is a lot of meaning behind this story. Oregon wants to send to (convey to the ) reader that women can endure a lot of pains more than men (,) such as laboring or carrying a baby (babies : talking in general) . In addition ( you may also use : besides , moreover , furthuremore ), Oregon also tells us not to be greedy. For example, if Maria agreed to make a wish, then the Fallen Angel would have succeeded (in) corrupting Maria. Maria is smart (enough) to realize she there is nothing for free. Lastly(finally is as good here ), Oregon’s message is that we should not give up our live(s) under any circumstances. We have to endure to live (strive , work hard , endeavour ), and we should live up (to) our dream(s).

In the story “The Legend of Maria Auxilio from Ease L.A.”, shows us that ( "In" at the begining ) each of individual (the individuals ) has (a) different background. Some people are lucky to have good lives, and there are others who are not. We should protect and help one another (attentive choice ) in time(s) of distress. We should not look down upon people who (are) below us. Their live (life ! ) stories might have overwhelmed us (might overwhelm us ).

Good article as whole , Tran4ga ! If you write more attentively , I am (quite) sure you will avoid many mistakes .

Hope I was of assistance !

Rosamond
heheh ok Rosamond, thanks for your time
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Thank you both. I wrote this story "The Legend of Maria Auxilio from East L.A." while I was in college and never imagined that someone would be writing a paper about my short story. Thank you for validating my work from so long ago!

Rita Oregon