Writing is very difficult for me, could you please check this essay for me?

thanks a lot for what you can do,

Chiara

(if it's too long, I can make is shorter)

Competition:
Should we travel alone, with friends or with family?
What are the benefits of each and are there any disadvantages?
Write and tell us what you think.

In the last decades travelling has become one of the most favourite activity of people of modern societies and one of the expenses they enjoy to make the most.
The widening of communications and transport, and the consequent rising of a much more competitive tourism’s market, has determined a massive growth of tourism towards all the five continents.

But although people of different countries, sex, age, and cultural and social backgrounds, share the same love of knowing a new place, they might not share the same way of travelling.

In fact some people prefer travelling with their friends, others with their family and others alone.
Let’s see some differences.

Wherever we are going, travelling with our friends usually seems to be great fun and allows us to share emotions and thoughts about the new experience with the people we like. Just make sure that you really get on well, or it could result a very disappointing experience!

Another possibility is travelling with our family. After a tough year of work and school, it can result one of the few moments in which we really enjoy family life. Just be careful about your sons’ never ending requests which can easily kill your holiday!

Besides these two types of travelling, always many more people choose to travel alone.

Firstly because travelling accompanied by other people limits our curiosity towards the country we are visiting and weakens the sense of discovery and mystery of our trip.
In contrast ravelling alone pushes us to know more closely and carefully the culture we meet and
consecuently to get in touch with different sides of our self. In fact it’s always worth to remember that the first meaning of travelling is overtaking our everyday limits and boundaries and “travelling” is one of the word we more frequently use in our definition of “life”.
It’s true that sometime being alone for too long results to be boring, but, besides local people, we can meet many other travellers which possibly become our friends.
Finally it’s undeniable that travelling alone is more dangerous and risky, but paying attention and avoiding silly risks, it’s an experience that is surely worth to try.
Writing is very difficult for me, could you please check this essay for me?

thanks a lot for what you can do,

Chiara

(if it's too long, I can make is shorter)

Competition:
Should we travel alone, with friends or with family?
What are the benefits of each and are there any disadvantages?
Write and tell us what you think.

In the last decades, travelling has become one of the most favourite activity of people of modern societies and one of the expenses they enjoy to make the most.
The widening of communication_ and transport, and the consequent rising of a much more competitive tourism’s market, has determined a massive growth of tourism towards all the five continents.

But Although people are different from countries, sex, age, cultures and social backgrounds, they share the same love of knowing a new place, they might not share the same way of travelling.

In fact, some people prefer travelling with their friends, others with their family and others alone.
Let’s see some differences.

Wherever we are going, travelling with our friends usually seems to be great fun and allows us to share emotions and thoughts about the new experience with the people we like. Just make sure that you really get on well, or it could result in a very disappointing experience!

Another possibility is travelling with our family. After a tough year of work and school, it can result one of the few moments in which we really enjoy family life. Just be careful about your sons’ never ending requests which can easily kill your holiday!

(Besides is not academic) In addition to these two types of travelling, always many more people choose to travel alone.

Firstly, because we are accompanied by other people in a trip. They limit our curiosity about the country where we are visiting and they weaken the sense of discovery and mystery of our trip. (This sentence is too long)

In contrast, travelling alone pushes us to know more closely and carefully about the culture which we meet and
consecuently to get in touch with different sides of our self
(This is not sentence). In fact, it’s always worth to remember that the first meaning of travelling is overtaking our everyday limits and boundaries and “travelling” is one of the word we more frequently use in our definition of “life”.
It’s true that sometime being alone for too long results to be boring, but, besides local people, we can meet many other travellers who possibly become our friends.
Finally it’s undeniable that travelling alone is more dangerous and risky, but paying attention and avoiding silly risks, it will be valuable experiences if we pay attention to some dangerous siutuations.

I've just found those mistakes.

Your sentences sometimes are too long!
K.I.S.S keep it short and simple!
Hello The leaves, you have been very kind to correct my writing: thanks a lot!

I will remember your advise no to write too long sentences. It can help me also to avoid making mistakes.

Ther's only one this correction I don't understand:

But Although people are different from countries, sex, age, cultures and social backgrounds, they share the same love of knowing a new place, they might not share the same way of travelling.

I meant to say that even so many kind of different people like travelling, not all of them like doing it in the same way.

I don't know, maybe I misundertood your correction.

Anyway... Thank you so much.

Chiara

... Oh! ... and if somebody wants to add other suggestions and so on, I'm always glad about it.

Bye!
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Competition:

Should we travel alone, with friends or with family?
What are the benefits of each and are there any disadvantages?
Write and tell us what you think.




In the last decades travelling has become one of the most a favourite activity for people of modern societies and one of the expenses they enjoy to make the most. The widening of communications and transport, and the consequent rising development of a much more competitive tourism’s market has determined a massive growth of tourism towards within all the five continents.

But although people of different countries, sex, age, and cultural and social backgrounds share the same love of knowing discovering a new place, they might not share the same way of travelling. Some people prefer travelling with their friends, others with their family, and others alone.

Let’s see some differences.

Wherever we are going, Travelling with our friends is usually seems to be great fun and allows us to share emotions and thoughts about the new experience with the people we like. Just make sure that you really get on well, or it could result a very disappointing experience! Another possibility is travelling with our family. After a tough year of work and school, it can result in one of the few rare moments in which we really enjoy family life. Just be careful about beware your sons’ never-ending requests which can easily kill your holiday!

Besides these two types of travelling, always Many more people choose to travel alone.Firstly because Travelling accompanied by other people limits our curiosity towards the country we are visiting and weakens the sense of discovery and mystery of our trip.
In contrast Travelling alone pushes us to know examine more closely and carefully the culture we meet and consequently to get in touch with different sides of our self. In fact it’s always worth to remember remembering that the first meaning of reason for travelling is overtaking to overcome our everyday limits and boundaries. andTravelling” is one of the a word we more frequently used in our definition of “life”.

It’s true that sometimes being alone for too long results to can be be boring, but besides local people, we can meet many other travellers which who might possibly become our friends.
Finally, it’s undeniable that travelling alone is more dangerous and risky, but paying attention and avoiding silly risks, it’s an experience that is surely worth to try. trying.
But Although people are different from countries, sex, age, cultures and social backgrounds, they share the same love of knowing a new place, they might not share the same way of travelling.

Because your sentence is too long so I was misunderstood yơur meaning.Emotion: smile

In dispite of the differences in countries, sex, age, cultures and social backgrounds, they share the same love of knowing a new place. However, they might not share the same way of traveling.

Have a nice day !!!
Hello Feebs, thank you very much for your corrections. (May I say this? Is there any other way to say it?)

May I ask few questions, please:

... growth of tourism towards within all the five continents. "Within" is a word I don' t use very often. Could I also say "in" or it has a different mening?

Just be careful about beware your sons’ never-ending requests which can easily kill your holiday! What is the difference between "beware/be careful"?

... that the firstis overtaking to overcome our everyday limits and boundaries. I never undesrtood the difference between these two verbs I thought they were synonimous "overtake/overcome".

...we can meet many other travellers which who might possibly become our friends. "Which/who": can't I use "which" for people?

... it’s an experience that is surely worth to try. trying. Can't the expression "it's worth..." be followed by an infinitive?

'hope I didn't ask too much...

Bye!

Chiara

To the leaves: Thank you for answering back. You are definetly right: my sentences are too long. I'll try to make them shorter.

Have a nice day you too!

Chiara
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ChiaraHello Feebs, thank you very much for your corrections. (May I say this? Is there any other way to say it?)

May I ask few questions, please:

... growth of tourism towards within all the five continents. "Within" is a word I don' t use very often. Could I also say "in" or it has a different mening? Yes, you can. I just chose "within" - no reason.

Just be careful about beware your sons’ never-ending requests which can easily kill your holiday! What is the difference between "beware/be careful"? In the context of your essay, "beware" implies "be wary of their demands" (you do not want to give in to your children's demands at all times because that will mean other people cannot do what they would like to do). To me, "Be careful" implies that you are taking care to avoid something going wrong.

... that the first is overtaking to overcome our everyday limits and boundaries. I never undesrtood the difference between these two verbs I thought they were synonimous "overtake/overcome". It's a question of whether you are commenting on the influence of travel to change personal attitudes and behaviour, or saying that "the meaning of travelling" is itself going beyond (overtaking) personal limits. I decided that you were really saying the first.
overtake = • verb (past overtook; past part. overtaken) 1 catch up with and pass while travelling in the same direction
overcome = • verb (
past overcame; past part. overcome) 1 succeed in dealing with (a problem).
You could change it to read "...the first can change our way of seeing the world".


...we can meet many other travellers which who might possibly become our friends. "Which/who": can't I use "which" for people? No.

... it’s an experience that is surely worth to try. trying. Can't the expression "it's worth..." be followed by an infinitive? No.

'hope I didn't ask too much...

Bye!

Chiara

To the leaves: Thank you for answering back. You are definetly right: my sentences are too long. I'll try to make them shorter.

Have a nice day you too!

Chiara

Hello Feebs, thank you very much.You' have been very nice.

Your explanations of "beware", "overcome" are very useful for me.

I thought "which" was fine with plural nouns of people... I need to practice.

Thank you!

Chiara