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I am seeking employment and I am wondering which sentence is grammitically correct and/or is stylistically better>

1) My strong academic record is evidenced by the fact that I have earned a Thurgood Marshall Scholar designation, which is a distinction that is reserved for the top 16-35% of my class.

2) My strong academic record is evidenced by the fact that I have earned a Thurgood Marshall Scholar designation, a distinction that is reserved for the top 16-35% of my class.

3) My strong academic record is evidenced by the fact that I have earned a Thurgood Marshall Scholar designation; a distinction that is reserved for the top 16-35% of my class.

Thanks so much
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Hi,

I am seeking employment and I am wondering which sentence is grammitically correct and/or is stylistically better>

1) My strong academic record is evidenced by the fact that I have earned a Thurgood Marshall Scholar designation, which is a distinction that is reserved for the top 16-35% of my class. OK

2) My strong academic record is evidenced by the fact that I have earned a Thurgood Marshall Scholar designation, a distinction that is reserved for the top 16-35% of my class. I prefer tihs version.

3) My strong academic record is evidenced by the fact that I have earned a Thurgood Marshall Scholar designation; a distinction that is reserved for the top 16-35% of my class. No correct.

I don't know anything about this designation. However, please don't be offended if I comment that it doesn't sound very exclusive to me if up to 35% of your class can have it.

Have you considered just saying this?

My strong academic record is evidenced by the fact that I have been selected as a Thurgood Marshall Scholar.

Best wishes, Clive
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Thanks Clive,

Let me ask you, are you sure that option 2 is grammitically correct? Apart from the style comment can one say:

My strong academic record is evidenced by the fact that I have earned a Thurgood Marshall Scholar designation, a distinction that is reserved for the top 16-35% of my class.

or is that a run-on. Do I need some sort of connecting word for the two clauses. I agree that it sounds better without the which.
Hi,

You later asked about this in a new thread, and I answered you there.

Clive