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Could someone look over the sentences below and let me know if I have all the necessary commas in the correct places or if anything needs to be added or changed. I only need to worry with the commas. Thanks

1. Because recent developments have taken place, the nation's future workforce may include an increasing number of older workers.

2. Mandatory retirement has become a thing of the past and the federal government has reduced or completely eliminated earnings restrictions on Social Security recipients.

3. In April 2000, the President signed a congressional bill that ended earnings penalties for Social Security recipients aged 65 or older.

4. This important bipartisan signing ceremony took place at the White House 1600 Pennsylania Avenue, Washington, D.C., in the presence of congressional leaders of both parties.

5. Since this bill, a long awaited piece of legislation by senior citizens allows older Americans to work and collect Social Security, workers will stay on the job longer.

6. Certainly, older workers bring to the job a variety of skills, excellent attendance records, and years of experience.

7. In addition, a strong growing economy is increasing the demand for new workers of all ages.

8. Many corporations however, still offer employee pension plans, which encourage early retirement.

9. Nevertheless, some economists believe that early retirement plans may be useful to the corporation for the short term not for the long run.

10. Therefore, job seekers may find more competition n the job market.
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1. Because recent developments have taken place, the nation's future workforce may include an increasing number of older workers. ok

2. Mandatory retirement has become a thing of the past, and the federal government has reduced or completely eliminated earnings restrictions on Social Security recipients. one comma added.

3. In April 2000, the President signed a congressional bill that ended earnings penalties for Social Security recipients aged 65 or older. ok

4. This important bipartisan signing ceremony took place at the White House, 1600 Pennsylania Avenue, Washington, D.C., in the presence of congressional leaders of both parties. one added

5. Since this bill, a long-awaited piece of legislation by senior citizens allows older Americans to work and collect Social Security, workers will stay on the job longer. "a... piece of legislation by senior citizens" is a strange phrase - as I would not have thought the bill was drafted and legislated solely by senior citizens. In any case, I would have used parentheses around (a long-awaited.... citizens), as this is an aside. You certainly need something after this clause.

6. Certainly, older workers bring to the job a variety of skills, excellent attendance records, and years of experience. ok

7. In addition, a strong, growing economy is increasing the demand for new workers of all ages. one added

8. Many corporations, however, still offer employee pension plans, which encourage early retirement. one added

9. Nevertheless, some economists believe that early retirement plans may be useful to the corporation for the short term, not for the long run. one added. The expression is "in the long run".

10. Therefore, job-seekers may find more competition n the job market. one hyphen added
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In # 2, the inserted comma is not needed becuase you have two independent clauses. When joined like this, a comma is not required.

I would disagree. Two independent clauses joined with an "and" should have a comma.

Like LRR, I too am puzzled by the long one about senior citizens. I assume that it was long anticipated by them, not created by them, but I couldn't parse the sentence.


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In # 2, the inserted comma is not needed becuase you have two independent clauses. When joined like this, a comma is not required.
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