Topic: It has been said that "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knoledge gained from books. In your opinion which source is more important? Why?

In this rapidly-changing world, learning is neccessary as never before. Man needs not just to satisfy his curiosity, but has to be able to compete with others. Many attend schools and colleges to further their knowledge; some take training courses according to their interests, while others prefer gaining knowlegde from books. Both ways are excellent ways to learn; however, they are different in many aspects.
In similarity, either by reading or experiencing, one will be able to learn almost everything he can think of. While experience is the knowledge gained from doing things, books are the record of it. Going abroad, for example, one can choose to get a plane ticket or buy books. While, experience it yourself in the real place is great. Books are also filled with enough pictures and information, written by others who have gone there, that is perfect for exploring the world at home.
On the other hand, it is clear that they are different in many ways. The first difference is in the writing that has enable man to record the past, and pass it from generation to generation. For example, if one wants to cook a special dish; what he needs is a recipe, no trial and error is needed. Some might argue that experiences can also be memorized, yet what they don't realize is that they can easily be twisted and lost. Moreover, books are an excellent guideline. Fixing cars, for instance, one cannot fix it without knowing about engine; books are where the information he needs is.
The second difference is that books are not everything. There is no deny that books are the best source of mankind's knowledge. Unfortunately, There is no book that can teach you how to swim unless you actually do it; you cannot bake cake by just looking at a recipe; and none of the scientists won the noble prizes because they only read textbooks. Experience is needed. In addtition, hand-on experience will bring you problems and difficulties allowing you to develop skills neccessary to survive in the real world. Books may tell you some common problems but the skills can be developed only if you have experienced it yourself.
In conclusion, one can learn so much either by reading or experiencing. Books contain all sorts of information, while, experience are also an important knowlegde. Which is more important? The answer is both. In order to get the most out of learning, we are not only need raw information but also have to put it into practice; as a saying goes “practice makes perfect.” Conversely, before experience something one should have enough data about it; as a saying goes “it is as well to know which ways the wind blows.”
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T_nattawat Topic: It has been said that "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knoledge gained from books. In your opinion which source is more important? Why?

In this rapidly-changing world, learning is neccessary as never before. Man needs not just to satisfy his curiosity, but has to be we need to (rephrase) to compete with others. Many attend schools and colleges to further their knowledge; some take training courses according to their interests, while others prefer gaining knowlegde from books. They are excellent ways to learn; however, they are different in many aspects.
In similarity, either by reading or experiencing, one will be able to learn almost everything he can think of. While experience is the knowledge gained from doing things, books are the record of it. Going abroad, for example, one can choose to get a plane ticket or buy books. While, experience it yourself in the real place is great. Books are also filled with enough pictures and information, written by others who have gone there, that is perfect for. You can explore the world at home.
On the other hand, it is clear that they are different in many ways. The first difference is in the writing that books have enable man to record the past, and pass it from generation to generation. For example, if one wants to cook a special dish; what he needs is a recipe, no trial and error is needed. Some might argue that experiences can also be memorized, yet what they don't realize is that they can easily be twisted and lost. Moreover, books are an excellent guideline. Fixing cars, for instance, one cannot fix cars without knowing about something about engines; books are where the information he needs is.
The second difference is that books are not everything. There is no denying that books are the best source of mankind's knowledge. Unfortunately, There is no book that can teach you how to swim unless you actually do it; you cannot bake a cake just by looking at a recipe; and none of the scientists won the Noble prizes just from reading textbooks. Experience is needed. In addtition, hands-on experience will bring you problems and difficulties allowing allows you to develop skills neccessary to survive in the real world. Books may tell you about some common problems but the skills can be developed only if you have experienced it yourself.
In conclusion, one can learn so much either by reading or experiencing. Books contain all sorts of information, while, experience are also an important source of knowlegde. Which is more important? The answer is both. In order to get the most out of learning, we are not only need raw information but also have to put it into practice; as a saying goes, “practice makes perfect.” (Quote before you explain.) Conversely, before experience something one should have enough data about it; as a saying goes “it is as well to know which ways the wind blows.”

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In this rapidly-changing world, we need to gain knowlegde as much as possible in order to compete with others. Many attend schools and colleges to further their knowledge; some take training courses according to their interests, while others prefer gaining knowlegde from books. They are excellent ways to learn; however, they are different in many aspects.
In similarity, reading and experiencing are both considered a tool for learning. They enable everyone to understand things and satisfy his curiousity. For example, the scientists gain knowledge by doing research, then, publish articles or book on that matter for us to read. In other words, we can gain knowledge from whatever the way we choose. Another example is when learning about other countries, one can choose either to get a plane ticket or to buy a book. Despite the difference that you do not get to see the country for yourself, books are filled with enough information and pictures that are great to explore countries of your interest.
On the other hand, it is clear that they are different in many ways. The first difference is books record the past, and can be passed from generation to generation. For example, if one wants to cook a special dish; what he needs is a recipe. Some might argue that experiences can also be memorized, yet what they don't realize is that they can easily be lost. Moreover, books are an excellent guide. For instance, one cannot fix cars without knowing something about engines; books are where the information is.
The second difference is that books are not everything. There is no denying that books are the best source of knowledge. Unfortunately, no book can teach you how to swim unless you actually do it; you cannot bake a cake just by just looking at a recipe; and none of the scientists won the Noble prizes just from reading textbooks. Experience is needed. In addtition, hands-on experience will allow you to develop skills neccessary to survive in the real world. Books may tell you about common problems but the skills can be developed only if you have experienced it yourself.
In conclusion, one can learn so much either by reading or experiencing. Books contain all sorts of information, while, experience are also an important source of knowledge. Which is more important? The answer is both. As a popular saying goes“practice makes perfect.” In order to get the most out of learning, we not only need raw information but also have to put it into practice; Conversely, as another saying goes “it is as well to know which ways the wind blows,” before experiencing something one should know enough about it.
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In this rapidly-changing world, we need to gain knowlegde as much _____ as possible in order to compete with others. Many attend schools and colleges to further their knowledge; some take training courses according to their interests, while others prefer gaining knowlegde from books. They are excellent ways to learn; however, they are different in many aspects.
In similarity, reading and experiencing are both considered a tool for learning. They enable everyone to understand things and satisfy his curiousity. For example, the scientists gain knowledge by doing research, then, publish articles or books on that matter for us to read. In other words, we can gain knowledge from whatever the way we choose. Another example is when learning about other countries, one can choose either to get a plane ticket or to buy a book. Despite the difference that you do not get to see the country for yourself, books are filled with enough information and pictures that are great to explore countries of your interest.
On the other hand, it is clear that they are different in many ways. The first difference is books record the past, and can be passed from generation to generation. For example, if one wants to cook a special dish; , all what he needs is a recipe. Some might argue that experiences can also be memorized, yet what they don't realize is that they can easily be lost. Moreover, books are an excellent guide. For instance, one cannot fix cars without knowing something about engines; books are where the information is.
However, books are not everything. There is no denying that books are the best source of knowledge. Unfortunately, no book can teach you how to swim unless you actually do it; you cannot bake a cake just by just looking at a recipe; and none of the scientists won the Noble prizes just from reading textbooks. Experience is needed. In addtition, hands-on experience will allow you to develop skills neccessary to survive in the real world. Books may tell you about common problems but the skills can be developed only if you have experienced it yourself.
In conclusion, one can learn so much either by reading or experiencing. Books contain all sorts of information, while, experience are also an important source of knowledge. Which is more important? The answer is both. As a popular saying goes, “practice makes perfect.” In order to get the most out of learning, we not only need raw information but also have to put it into practice; Conversely, as another saying goes: “it is as well to know which ways the wind blows,before experiencing something one should know enough about it.
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