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Is this sentence correct:


"I remember a boy who had been to America to undergo a surgical operation, and later he received the visit of his surgeon doctor, in his hometown, who upon their reunion, offered him a remotely controlled car."

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Christine ChristieIs this sentence correct:

Almost. For one thing, there is too much for one sentence.

"I remember a boy who had been to America to undergo a surgical operation. Later, the surgeon visited him in his hometown and upon their reunion gave the boy a remote-control car."