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Hi all,

I have tried to write out a short paragraph on this topic called: Adjusting to a different culture. I hope that you guys can help to pin point what are the mistakes in this paragraph.

People often have difficulties in adjusting to a different culture for three reasons. Firstly, a sudden change in climate might pose problems for people coming from countries that have little changes in their climate. The dramatic changes in climate, such as China, might caused people to fall sick easily as their immune system are not able to handle these changes well. Secondly, communicating with people from diverse background. People coming from countries that use their mother tongue language to communicate solely will find it hard to adjust in a country that places great importance on English language. The difference in language barrier pose as a challenge to them and it might even caused them to feel isolated. Thirdly, the different living habits from each countries. People who are used to live in urban areas might find it hard to adjust well in rural areas. They might feel frustrated easily as the rural areas are not able to provide some of the advanced facilities they had back in their countries. In conclusion, it takes time for one to adjust well in a culture that is completely new to them.

Thanks!

Cheers,

Jennifer Unagi:)
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Helo Jennifer Unagi,

I found a few errors but not too many. I have highlighted my suggestions in blue.

Regards,

John

People often have difficulties adjusting to a different cultures for three reasons. Firstly, varying changes in climate might pose problems for people coming from countries that have little change in climate. Dramatic changes in climate, such as in China, might cause people to fall sick easily because their immune systems are not able to handle such changes very well. Secondly, communicating with people from diverse backgrounds can hinder adjustment. People who use their native language exclusively and do not learn the local language will find it hard to adjust to life in a country that places great importance, for example, on English. The language barrier can pose a great challenge and it might even cause them to feel isolated. Thirdly, living habits change from country to country. People who are used to living in urban areas might find it hard to adjust to living in rural areas. They might feel frustrated because rural areas may not be able to provide some of the advanced facilities they had back in the cities of their home countries. In conclusion, it takes time for one to adjust well to a culture that is completely new.
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Hi John,

thanks for the suggestions.

If you were to grade this short paragraph, what grade would it be?

Cheers,

Jennifer Unagi:)
Is the grade for the English or the content or both?
The grading part in term of tenses, language and content.

Thanks!
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