hi all ...

This is my essay which i had sent it to my teacher by the e-mail. He wanted to write an essay and we must use ( present perfect , past perfect and past simple).

Can u check it,plz...? and thanx alot..Emotion: smile
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Mini Arts Festival

It is a nice thing to join in any activity in our college, because it develops our talents and the Mini Arts Festival was one of these activities. It was fantastic and I had spent an interesting time in that day.

There are many activities were happened and I have never seen like it before. Many students from other colleges have visited that Festival. I saw a student from SWC and i think i met her once before. Also, We saw a local movie which was made by a student from RKMC and I had never seen such a strange movie before. We watched also a lyric presentations and the SWC students presented it. In addition, They have been creative. I had been in the Activity Hall for over two hours. There were also other activities such as Coloring the rocks, the drawing on the cloths, the presentation of artistic paintings and they sold some books also, it was really a nice day.

At the end, I would like to thanks the people who supervised that day and I appreciate them because this Festival showed many talents of the students and I think it will let them to participate in other colleges.
Hi Strawberry,
I tried to corresct your essay.

Here is it:

Mini Arts Festival

It is a nice thing to participate in any activity held in our college, because it develops our talents. The Mini Arts Festival was one of those activities. It was fantastic so that I had spent an interesting time that day.

There were many activities that were held and I have never seen like them before. Many students from other colleges have visited that Festival. I saw a student from SWC and I think I met her once before. That day, we watched a local movie which had been made by a student from RKMC, and I had never watched such a strange movie before. We also listened to some lyric presentations that the SWC students have presented. They have been so creative. I had been in the Activity Hall for over two hours. There were also other activities such as coloring rocks, drawing on the cloths, the presentation of artistic paintings. Some books were exhibited for sale, also. It was a really nice day.

At the end, I would like to thank people who supervised that day and I appreciate what they have done because that Festival showed me the talents many students have. I think those talented students will have the chance to participate in other colleges festivals.
Normally 'comma' is not used in front of 'because'. If you insist to put 'comma', use 'for insteasd of 'because'.
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Thank u all (ALi and lucialuan)Emotion: smile

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  3. Write your thesis statement. ...
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  6. Write the conclusion. ...
  7. Add the finishing touches

Follow those steps. Good luck.

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