My Essay:

The given schemes illustrate the process in which instant noodles are manufactured.

As is evident from the diagram, there are 3 main phases, which commence with flour storage, followed by processing noodles, and end with labeling and sealing complete products.

To begin with, flour, which is a fundamental material to make noodles, is transferred into storage silos to be kept in good condition. In the next step, the stored flour together with oil and water are put into a mixer to create dough sheets. By mean of rollers, this substance pass through a machine which cuts it into dough strips at the fourth stage. In the following operation, dough strips are converted into noodle discs which are then cooked in oil and dried.

The seventh step involves putting dried noodles into separate cups and adding vegetables and spices to them. Finally, labels are added to cups which are sealed after that to finish the manufacturing process.

P/s: Can you give me the band I can achieve with this essay. Thank you

The given (unnatural) schemes (wrong word. Read my advice for names of these graphics. Also, there is only one.) illustrate the process in which instant noodles are manufactured.

As is evident from the diagram, (Delete. Read my advice) there are 3 three (When there is a small number that is not a data value, use words, not digits.) main stages phases, which commence with flour storage, followed by processing noodles, and end with labeling and sealing the finished complete products.

To begin with, flour, which is main ingredient a fundamental material (Material is for things like concrete or bricks. Food items are called ingredients.) to make noodles, is transferred into storage silos and stored until needed. to be kept in good condition. (Do not make inferences or deductions for task 1.) In the next step, (You never mentioned "step" before.) the stored (It is not in the silos at this point) flour together with oil and water are put into a mixer to create dough sheets. (You are getting ahead of yourself - out of sequence. The dough goes through rollers to make sheets.) By mean of rollers the mixture this substance (wrong word choice) pass (wrong verb form) through a machine which cuts it into dough strips at the fourth stage. (you never mentioned "stage") In the following operation, dough strips are converted into noodle discs which are then cooked in oil and dried.

The seventh (What happened to 5 and 6? Also, in the overview, you said there were only three, so where did seven come from?) step involves putting dried noodles into separate cups and adding vegetables and spices to them. Finally, labels are added to cups which are sealed after that to finish the manufacturing process.


The cohesion and coherence are poor.

You mentioned in the overview, three "phases" and then described seven steps and stages. You never mentioned "phase" again. Besides, "phase" is not a good word choice. This random use of vocabulary words is not good for your score. Using synonyms does not work well in Task 1, where precision, accuracy, and logic are required.

Do not draw conclusions, give opinions or make inferences in Task 1.

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Sample essay: (~175 words)

The flow diagram illustrates the process of making instant noodles in an automated assembly-line factory.

Instant noodles are cups of dry ingredients, which, with water added, make a quick lunch. The manufacturing process is a continuous one consisting of eight steps, six of which are involved in making the dehydrated noodles from flour, water and oil. The preparation of the minor ingredients, vegetables and spices is not shown.

In detail, the factory is supplied with flour, delivered by truck to storage silos. In the first two steps, flour from the silos is combined with water and oil to form dough. In steps 3-5, the dough is flattened into thin sheets through a set of rollers, and then sliced into long, narrow strips. The strips are again sliced and flattened into small discs, which, in step 6, are deep fried in an oil bath and dried. Steps 7 and 8 complete the process. The dried noodles are combined with dehydrated vegetables and spices into cups, which are labeled and sealed, ready for delivery to markets.