Please correct the below sentence

Respected Mam,

My Daughter R. Rekha studying fifth std, c sec in your school, we planned to go sabaraimala temple from 17th Dec to 20th Dec, on these days half yearly examinations are scheduled so i request you to grant the leave to her.


This may vary by region, but I am used to seeing "Ma'am," rather than "Mam."

Respected Ma'am:
My daughter, R. Rekha, is in the fifth std, C sec in your school. We plan to go to Sabaraimala Temple from 17th Dec to 20th Dec. Half-yearly examinations are scheduled on these days, so I request that you grant her a leave.