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Hello.

One of the activities our English teacher makes us do for homework is to correct other students writings and mark them. I've found it a really useful way to learn English by looking at other people's mistakes. But sometimes it's very difficult indeed. Now I understand how difficult it is to correct compositions.

Well, the writing I have to correct this week is a letter to the president of a country where guns are legal. I've found some mistakes in my classmate's letter, and here are my corrections, are they correct? Thank you in advance.

'If you take the weapons from the people in the streets will disapear the violence and the death.'

'............................violence and death will disappear.'

...You could avoid the robs, the crime and the drugs.

'... You could prevent robberies, crime and drugs.'

'The people need to work to win money.'

'People need to work to earn money.'

'The society need ...'

'The society needs ...'

'On weekend they could be open more time.'

'At the weekend ...'

(PS: Moderators, I know you always ask for more specific titles, but this time it was really difficult, sorry about that)
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'If you take the weapons from the people in the streets will disapear the violence and the death.'

'............................violence and death will disappear.' OK

...You could avoid the robs, the crime and the drugs.

'... You could prevent robberies, crime and drugs.' I don't think you can prevent drugs; maybe drug dealings?

'The people need to work to win money.'

'People need to work to earn money.' "earn" is correct; I'm not so sure you can drop the "the" before "people", it depends on the context

'The society need ...'

'The society needs ...' I think the singular is correct

'On weekend they could be open more time.'

'At the weekend ...' I'd say "during" or "over" the weekend, and "longer" instead of "more time"



But wait till someone else sees this.
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in addition to what has been said, I think we should change crime by crimes in this sentence '... You could prevent robberies, crime and drugs.' so it will become "You could prevent robberies, crimes and drug dealing"

"You could prevent robberies, crimes and drug dealing"

This does not make sense, because robberies and drug dealing are crimes.

You could say eg "You could prevent robberies, drug dealing and other crimes."

what you are saying is true, thanks for sharing !

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