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<A picture of a beach in Phuket>

This is a beach in Phuket, a well-known tourist attraction in Asia. Here's some information about Phuket I've just looked up: 48.7 miles long and 21.3 miles across, Phuket is the largest island in Thailand, about the size of Singapore. Surrounding the main island are many small secluded islands. The temperature is warm all year round, ranging from 20 to 36 degrees Celcious. The rainy season starts in September and runs until October.

I've always wanted to visit it but never have the time or luxury to realize my dreams. It's said that, "You can't even find a footprint on many of the beaches." I don't know when the information was posted but I'm sure it's not applicable to many commercialized beaches and sure Phuket is no longer a remote island that it used to be. Anyhow, I'd still like to experience the laid back life and white sandy beaches that the place offers. It's satisfying enough just to imagine lying on the sandy beach, lined with coconut palm trees swaying in the wind, with a cold magarita in my hand, listening to waves crashing onto the beach.

Please correct any mistakes.

Thanks in advance.
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Hi,

<A picture of a beach in Phuket>

This is a beach in Phuket, a well-known tourist attraction in Asia. Here's some information about Phuket I've just looked up. Phuket is the largest island in Thailand, about the size of Singapore. It's 48.7 miles long and 21.3 miles across. Surrounding the main island are many small, secluded ones. The temperature is warm all year round, ranging from 20 to 36 degrees Celcius. The rainy season is in September and October.

I've always wanted to visit it but never have the time or luxury to realize my dreams. It's said that, "You can't even find a footprint on many of the beaches." I don't know when the information was posted, but I'm sure it's not applicable to many of the commercialized beaches, and I'm sure sure Phuket is no longer the remote island that it used to be. Anyhow, I'd still like to experience the laid-back life and white sandy beaches that the place offers. It's satisfying enough just to imagine lying on the sandy beach, lined with coconut palm trees swaying in the wind, with a cold magarita in my hand, listening to waves crashing onto the beach.


I'd like to go there right now.

Clive
I'd like to go there too! I even dream about sailing under blue skies.

OK. back to corrections. Is the following incorrect or just clumsy?

48.7 miles long and 21.3 miles across, Phuket is the largest island in Thailand, about the size of Singapore.

Can I make the following change because I want to make it a general statement?

I'm sure it's not applicable to many of the commercialized beaches
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Hi,

Is the following incorrect or just clumsy?

48.7 miles long and 21.3 miles across, Phuket is the largest island in Thailand, about the size of Singapore. What I didn't like in particular was the colon after 'up', because you gave some information, but then just gave other information in separate sentences. So, I didn't know why you used a colon.

Your version is not wrong, but I like mine better. I think it's better to give the general statement, followed by the approximation (about the size of . . ) and then finally the precise information.


Can I make the following change because I want to make it a general statement?

I'm sure it's not applicable to many of the commercialized beaches

'Of the' makes it clearer that you are talking specifically about the commercialized beaches in Thailand.

Best wishes, Clive
Thanks, Clive!
Anyhow, I'd still like to experience the laid-back life and white sandy beaches that the place offers

Clive, I just noticed I used anyhow in my writing. This is the first time I've ever used that word. My mind was thinking anyway but it came out to be anyhow. So, can I replace it with anyway? Sorry for not catching this earlier.

Thanks in advance!
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Hi,'

There's really no difference in such a context. 'Anyhow' sounds a little more casual to me.

Clive
I feel much better now. Again, thanks.