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Why is it so bizarre for people to get cosmetic enhancements to better themselves? Who are we to judge these individuals? Why judge a book by its cover when it's only human nature to want to better ourselves? Getting surgery to better your appearance is actually showing great humility, because it means that you see a flaw in yourself and you've tried to change it. Look beyond the superficial aspect of "cosmetic" surgery and you should have a better understanding about life and the pursuit of perfection. The irony of it is that it goes both ways in that if you don't look beyond the appearance aspect of cosmetic surgery you're just as shallow as the person who you're demoralizing for changing thyself for the better. Let's not forget the double standard in plastic surgery, because an operation is an operation and naturalness is what was given to you from the minute you were born and if you've altered it then it is no longer natural. Naturalness is best, but striving to become the best is no fault and to me is commended!

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Precious - your writing has improved dramatically over the last few months. Congratulations.
I have only a few suggestions. Some concern grammar, some are about style. I can't say that I follow your reasoning, but your writing has definitely improved.

Why is it so bizarre for people to get cosmetic enhancements to better themselves? Who are we to judge these individuals? Why judge a book by its cover when it's only human nature to want to better ourselves? Getting surgery to better your appearance is actually showing great humility, because it means that you see a flaw in yourself and you've tried to change it. Look beyond the superficial aspect of "cosmetic" surgery, and you will have a better understanding about life and the pursuit of perfection. The irony is that it goes both ways. If you don't look beyond the appearance aspect of cosmetic surgery, you're just as shallow as the person you're demoralizing (not the best word; try another) for changing themselves for the better. Let's not forget the double standard in plastic surgery. An operation is an operation, and naturalness is what was given to you from the minute you were born. If you've altered it then it's no longer natural. Naturalness is best, but striving to become the best is no fault. In fact, I believe it's to be commended!
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JohnParisJohnParis wrote: Cosmetic sugery theory (Original post)QuotePrecious - your writing has improved dramatically over the last few months. Congratulations.I have only a few suggestions. Some concern grammar, some are about style. I can't say that I follow your reasoning, but your writing has definitely improved.
Thank you so much for you kind words and expertise! I'm trying very hard to improve my English writing as much as possible as it is my first language.