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vote for your favourite mooncake flavours, complete this slogan "I like this flavour because ..." in not more than 20 words...

I am participating a competition.
Here is the slogan I wrote.

Could anybody correct it for me?

I like this flavour beacuse its just amazing,its jut melts in my mouth like soft butter,and the aroma is so great that I can taste it long after I have had one
Many thanks in advance.
Comments  
Hi!
dude! i think you should add more colour to your slogan. like by adding some cute and mouthwatering vocabulary! because you are talkin about mooncakes and it should be shown by your slogan that should encourage people to EAT MOONCAKE or else die! hehehe
Agree with Izza.The slogan should portray the taste of the mooncake.