hi, i am new here, could you please check my cover letter shown below,and advice me if something is wrong.

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Dear Sir/Madam,

First, I would like to thank you for your generosity to offer such a training position for other countries’ students. I am writing in response to your advertisement for a work experience offer your respective University is announcing for in the ******** which suits with my educational backgrounds and my qualifications.

During my studies, I developed a strong interest in sciences that integrates mechanical devices with electronic controls. I have been interested in many courses related to Mechatronics such as “Mechanics of Machinery”, “Electronics”, “Microcontrollers” and ”Control”. In order to strengthen this interest and gain some useful insight, I chose to study “Mechatronics design” this semester. The enclosed CV and the list of all engineering subjects that I have studied at the university highlight my skills in the area of Mechatronics Engineering field.

In this respect, I would like to inform you kindly my interest in completing the required training hours in the Department of Mechanical Engineering at *********, which is one of the largest and most advanced departments in mechanical engineering in UK. The work offered was the most exciting and challenging opportunity, and could be useful for future diploma, project or thesis work. The work experience in another country will teach me much about myself, about my own culture and aspirations, and will affect my career choices in the future, without forgetting that ******** can provide work experience which will definitely stand out on my CV, so this experience will improve my knowledge and my cultural awareness. Therefore, I am looking forward to get the training opportunity in which I can build up afterwards.

Thank your for your time and consideration; I hope to hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

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Edit by MrP: all personal details removed.
Firstly, I would like to thank you for your generosity in offering a training position to students from other countries. I am writing in response to your advertisement for work experience at the ******** . My educational background and my qualifications fit well with this.

During my studies, I developed a strong interest in sciences that integrate mechanical devices with electronic controls. I have been interested in many courses related to Mechatronics such as “Mechanics of Machinery”, “Electronics”, “Microcontrollers” and ”Control”. In order to strengthen this interest and gain some useful insight, I chose to study “Mechatronics design” this semester. The enclosed CV and the list of all engineering subjects that I have studied at the university highlight my skills in the area of Mechatronics Engineering field.

In this respect, I am very interested in completing the required training hours in the Department of Mechanical Engineering at *********, which is one of the largest and most advanced departments in mechanical engineering in UK. The work offered was a very exciting and challenging opportunity, and could be useful for my future diploma, project or thesis work. Gaining work experience in another country will teach me much about myself, my own culture and aspirations, and will affect my career choices in the future, without forgetting that ******** can provide work experience which will definitely stand out on my CV, so this experience will improve my knowledge and my cultural awareness. Therefore, I really hope you will consider me for this training opportunity.

Thank your for your time and consideration; I hope to hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

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i really don't know how to thank u for helping me, you r great, but now, do u think the cover letter nedd some additions or eliminations, as u see, i did not talk much about myself, as i told in the letter that my skills are in cv, so what do u think?