The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufacturers in
the years 2005 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main
features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table compares the worldwide market share for different mobile phone factories between
2005 and 2006.
Overall, Nokia was the largest manufacturer which had the most market share in 2005 and
2006. By contrast, BenQ Mobile and LG not only had smaller market share but also decreased
over the period.
It can be seen that Nokia had the most market share, which increased from 32,5% to 35% over
the period. Motorola had a significant increase from 17,7% in 2005 to 21,1% in 2006. Sony
Ericsson also had a slight increase from 6,3% to 7,4%.
There was a clear contrast between the above manufacturers and others. Samsung had a slight
decrease of market share by 0,9% which was higher than LG. LG decreased from 6,7% in 2005
to 6,3% in 2006. BenQ Mobile had the most decrease among 6 big manufactures. In 2005,
BenQ Mobile market share was 4,9% then dramatically decreased to 2,4% in 2006. Other
mobile factories’ market share also had a decrease from 19,2 to 16,2 over the period.

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Answer

The table compares the worldwide market share for different mobile phone factories between 2005 and 2006.


Overall, Nokia was the largest manufacturer which had the most market share in 2005 and 2006. By contrast, BenQ Mobile and LG not only had smaller market share but also decreased over the period.


It can be seen that Nokia had the most market share, which increased from 32,5% to 35% over the period. Motorola had a significant increase from 17,7% in 2005 to 21,1% in 2006. Sony Ericsson also had a slight increase from 6,3% to 7,4%.


There was a clear contrast between the above manufacturers and others. Samsung had a slight decrease of market share by 0,9% which was higher than LG. LG decreased from 6,7% in 2005 to 6,3% in 2006. BenQ Mobile had the most decrease among 6 big manufactures. In 2005, BenQ Mobile market share was 4,9% then dramatically decreased to 2,4% in 2006. Other mobile factories’ market share also had a decrease from 19,2 to 16,2 over the period.

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The table compares the worldwide market share for different mobile phone factories (Wrong word. e.g. Nokia has many factories.) between 2005 and 2006. (How many are in the list?)


Overall, Nokia was the largest manufacturer which (redundant) had the highest most market share. in 2005 and 2006. By contrast, BenQ Mobile and LG not only had smaller market shares (There are two of them) but they also decreased. over the period. (That is not particularly good, since all the others had a smaller share than Nokia, and there were others that decreased..)

(You will not get a high score by just copying values from the table to your text. You need to do some logical combinations.)
It can be seen that Nokia had the most highest market share, which increased from 32,5% to 35% over the period. (There are only 2 time points. You said that the table compared them, so you do not need "period." Motorola had a significant increase from 17,7% in 2005 to 21,1% in 2006. Sony Ericsson also had a slight increase from 6,3% to 7,4%.

There was a clear contrast between these above manufacturers and others. Samsung had a slight decrease of in market share by 0,9% which was higher than LG. LG decreased from 6,7% in 2005 to 6,3% in 2006. BenQ Mobile had the most decrease among the six 6 big manufactures. (wrong word. And the reader is confused - which are the six big companies?) In 2005, BenQ Mobile's market share was 4,9% then dramatically decreased was cut in half to 2,4% in 2006. Other mobile factories(Which ones are you writing about?) market share also had a decrease from 19,2 to 16,2 over the period.


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For example, Honda Motor Company makes Honda cars, engines and motorcycles. Honda Motor Company has factories in several states in the US, as well as in Japan and other countries.

Honda Motor Company is a car manufacturer. They have factories in many locations.

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