Dear Ms Cindy Incardona
I am writing to inquire about Celin Cosmetics' products. Especially i am interested in Celin concealer but unfortunately i cannot try and buy none of them because i live in Greece-Athens and i cannot even found Celin Cosmetics at Sephoras which are in Greece. Of course it is possible to order Celin Cosmetics products online via Sephora (USA) but please could you say me, how can i order any make up product especially if it is a concealer without testing it before?

Unfortunately i have serious dark circles under the eyes and i cannot go out without using concealer that's why i had been using Dior Anticerne Perfecteur Long-Wearing Moisturizing Concealer since 2002 and it was the best brand of concealer for me between all concealer brands but last year Dior stopped its sales all over the world. Sadly i had to search other concealer brands and i read so many positive comments about Celin concealer and i wanted to try it but as i said before unfortunately i couldn't test it because of the reasons above.

So I would be grateful if you could send me four shades (ivory , fair, light golden, medium beige) of them as tester thus i can choose my best color and order three tubes online peacefully.

Thank you for your help from now

Hearing from you soon

Lali
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Dear Ms Cindy Incardon:

I am writing to inquire about Celin Cosmetics products. Because I am unable to sample your company's Celin concealer in Athens, I would appreciate if you could send me four shades (ivory , fair, light golden, medium beige) as a test.

Because I live in Greece-Athens, I am not able to try and buy any of your company's products. Even our popular store Sephoras does not carry your products. Of course it is possible to order Celin Cosmetics products online via Sephora (USA), but it is very expensive, especially if I am not satisfied with the product.

Unfortunately I have dark circles under my eyes and I cannot go out without using concealer. That is why i have been using Dior Anticerne Perfecteur Long-Wearing Moisturizing Concealer since 2002. Last year, however, Dior stopped its sales all over the world. I have been searching for a replacement product and have read so many positive comments about Celin concealer that I want to try it.

I would be grateful if you could please send me four shades (ivory , fair, light golden, medium beige) as a test. If I am satisfied, then I will choose my best color and order online.

Should you have any questions, please feel free to contact me. Thank you for your assistance.

Sincerely,

Lali

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Okay, so now I learn that this is an exercise, not an earnest letter.

Dear Ms Cindy Incardonaz (colon, comma, space?)

I am writing to inquire about Celin Cosmetics' products. It should be, "I am especially interested in...." Especially i am interested in Celin concealer but unfortunately i cannot try and buy none (any?) of them because i (capital "I") live in Greece-Athens and i (capital "I") cannot even found (find?) Celin Cosmetics at Sephoras which are in Greece. Of course it is possible to order Celin Cosmetics products online via Sephora (USA) but please could you say (tell?) me, how can i order any make up product especially if it is a concealer without testing it before? Your sentence is too long, and might even be a run-on. Before writing with long complext sentences, try smaller, easier sentences.

Unfortunately i have serious dark circles under the (my?) eyes and i cannot go out without using concealer (period?) that's why i had (have?) been using Dior Anticerne Perfecteur Long-Wearing Moisturizing Concealer since 2002 and it was the best brand of concealer for me between (among?) all concealer brands but last year Dior stopped its sales all over the world. Sadly i (capital "I") had to search other concealer brands and i (capital "I") read so many positive comments about Celin concealer and i (capital "I") wanted to try it but as i (capital "I") said before unfortunately i (capital "I") couldn't test it because of the reasons above.

So I would be grateful if you could send me four shades (ivory , fair, light golden, medium beige) of them as tester (perhaps a period and then start a new sentence?) thus i (capital "I") can choose my best color and order three tubes online peacefully (peacefully?, I have no clue what that is about).

Thank you for your help from now

Hearing from you soon

Lali

I am not sure if someone gave you text and you were supposed to correct it. Or if you were to write a letter to solve a problem. But the letter above has many errors. If nothing else, try to write with smaller sentences so that you can manage them.
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Hi MountainHiker,

Do you think it is better than first one? i wrote the other letter and mixed it with yours...
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Dear Ms Cindy Incardon

I am writing to inquire information about Celin Cosmetics' products. I am especially interested in Celin concealer. Since I live in Athens, Greece, I can not find your products, even in Europe Sephoras. Of course it is possible to order Celin Cosmetics products online via Sephora (USA). But could you, please, tell me how it senses to buy a make-up product, particularly a concealer, without testing it before? It does not sound sensible.

My problem is about having serious dark circles under my eyes and I can not go out without using concealer. That's why I have been using Dior Anticerne Perfecteur Long-Wearing Moisturizing Concealer since 2002. And it was the best brand of concealer among all concealer brands for me. But last year Dior stopped its sales all over the world. Sadly, I have been searching for a replacement product and I have read so many positive comments about Celin concealer that i want to try it.

I would be grateful if you could send me four shades of them as testers (ivory, fair, light golden, medium beige). I am quite sure i will be satisfied with your concealer product but still i need choose the best color for me and order three tubes peacefully online.


Should you have any questions, please feel free to contact me. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Look forward to hearing from you soon
i wrote the new letter above before i saw your correction...

let's see what are my mistakes...
Dear Ms Cindy Incardon
I am writing to inquire information about Celin Cosmetics' products. I am especially interested in Celin concealer. Since I live in Athens, Greece, I can not find your products, even in Europe Sephoras. Of course it is possible to order Celin Cosmetics products online via Sephora (USA). But could you, please, tell me how it senses to buy a make-up product, particularly a concealer, without testing it before? It does not sound sensible.
My problem is about having serious dark circles under my eyes and I can not go out without using concealer. That's why I have been using Dior Anticerne Perfecteur Long-Wearing Moisturizing Concealer since 2002. And it was the best brand of concealer among all concealer brands for me. But last year Dior stopped its sales all over the world. Sadly, I have been searching for a replacement product and I have read so many positive comments about Celin concealer that i want to try it.
I would be grateful if you could send me four shades of them as testers (ivory, fair, light golden, medium beige). I am quite sure I will be satisfied with your concealer product but still I need choose the best color for me and order three tubes peacefully online.

Should you have any questions, please feel free to contact me. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Look forward to hearing from you soon

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Hi again MountainHiker,

I got it all, thank you so much... You are right, the letter was written to solve a problem of my friend. She can not even know how to introduce herself in English. I don't say my english is perfect or I wouldn't be here to ask help you but still I accept my friend request to help her.

If it was not formal letter probably i wouldn't ask about it here but i wanted the letter to be considered by MS Cindy.

That's all
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I will highlight your touble spots.

Dear Ms Cindy Incardon

I am writing to inquire information about Celin Cosmetics' products. I am especially interested in Celin concealer. Since I live in Athens, Greece, I can not find your products, even in Europe Sephoras. Of course it is possible to order Celin Cosmetics products online via Sephora (USA). But could you, please, tell me how it senses to buy a make-up product, particularly a concealer, without testing it before? It does not sound sensible.

My problem is about having serious dark circles under my eyes and I can not go out without using concealer. That's why I have been using Dior Anticerne Perfecteur Long-Wearing Moisturizing Concealer since 2002. And it was the best brand of concealer among all concealer brands for me. But last year Dior stopped its sales all over the world. Sadly, I have been searching for a replacement product and I have read so many positive comments about Celin concealer that i want to try it.

I would be grateful if you could send me four shades of them as testers (ivory, fair, light golden, medium beige). I am quite sure i (Capital I) will be satisfied with your concealer product but still i
(Capital I) need to choose the best color for me and order three tubes peacefully (what is peacefully? Don't understand) online.

Should you have any questions, please feel free to contact me. Thank you for your time and consideration.

Look forward to hearing from you soon

Yes, better, but still requires work.
I can't keep up with your messages and revisions. Please do one at a time and then wait for a response.
OK, I am sorry I didn't know, you would reply it immediately I didn't want to be seem impatient. By the way did you mean "trouble spot" with "touble spot" or not? And what's wrong with yellow highlights that you marked on?

And about your question "I need to choose the best color for me and order three tubes peacefully (what is peacefully? Don't understand) online." I wrote peacefully because I don't know which color is perfect for me that's why i can not order it three tubes in once online. If I know the correct color/shade I can order it with an inner calm I meant.

Is it clear now? Emotion: smile
MountainHikerI will highlight your touble spots.
Dear Ms Cindy Incardon
I am writing to inquire information about Celin Cosmetics' products. I am especially interested
in Celin concealer. Since I live in Athens, Greece, I can not find
your products, even in Europe Sephoras. Of course it is possible to
order Celin Cosmetics products online via Sephora (USA). But could you,
please, tell me how it senses to buy a make-up product, particularly a
concealer, without testing it before? It does not sound sensible.My
problem is about having serious dark circles under my eyes and I can
not go out without using concealer. That's why I have been using Dior
Anticerne Perfecteur Long-Wearing Moisturizing Concealer since 2002. And
it was the best brand of concealer among all concealer brands for me.
But last year Dior stopped its sales all over the world. Sadly, I have
been searching for a replacement product and I have read so many
positive comments about Celin concealer that i want to try it. I
would be grateful if you could send me four shades of them as testers
(ivory, fair, light golden, medium beige). I am quite sure i (Capital I) will be
satisfied with your concealer product but still i (Capital I) need to choose the best
color for me and order three tubes peacefully (what is peacefully? Don't understand) online.Should you have any questions, please feel free to contact me. Thank you for your time and consideration. Look forward to hearing from you soon Yes, better, but still requires work.
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