Dear all!

i'm working at library . i'm writing mail to member who reserve the book to collect the book.. could you pls check my english writing? or do you have any idea for writing better than this.

dear.........,

The book you've reserved is availible now..so please come and collect the book till 25/1/2007 . Otherwise your reservation will be cancelled...

thanks for your time

chaw su
Chaw SuDear all!

i'm working at library . i'm writing mail to member who reserve the book to collect the book.. could you pls check my english writing? or do you have any idea for writing better than this.

dear.........,

The book you've reserved is availible now..so please come and collect the book till 25/1/2007 . Otherwise your reservation will be cancelled...

thanks for your time

chaw su

available,

replace till by "before or on"

for me, "thanks for your time" is not appropriate in such a situation. Maybe the following are better:

thanks for your cooperation

thanks for your reading

or just put "thanks" there.

BTW, I am not a native english speaker, I just try to help.
Dear Osee,

Thank you , anyway!

chaw su!
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Chaw Su.

Dear.........,

The book you reserved is now available. It will be kept for you until 25/1/2007 . If you do not collect it by that date, the reservation will be cancelled.
Yours sincerely

Dear feebs,

That's much better!!

thanks for your time

best wishes,

chaw su
Chaw SuDear all!

i'm working at library . i'm writing mail to member who reserve the book to collect the book.. could you pls check my english writing? or do you have any idea for writing better than this.

dear.........,

The book you've reserved is availible now..so please come and collect the book till 25/1/2007 . Otherwise your reservation will be cancelled...

thanks for your time

chaw su

Dear ,

The book that you have reserved is available now. Please come before 25th Jan 2007 to collect your book. Your reservation will be cacelled after due date.

Thanks.
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Dear Anonymous,

thanks for your cooperation!

good luck!

chaw su