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My answer is not totally correct when you asked me about the procedure of the samples to ABC customer on last Friday. Because I was mixed up the step with BCD customer. I would like to revise it for you again. For my pervious arrangement / handled, I will informed the factory to prepared the specify samples and provide them a delivery note send the samples to the customer office directly after the mass production is no problem. The customer will allocate the sample and send 2pcs to their office by themselves. Finally, I will return the receipt to our marketing department for their reference.
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Hi,

My answer is not totally correct when you asked me about the procedure of the samples to ABC customer on last Friday. Because I was mixed up the step with BCD customer. I would like to revise it for you again. For my pervious arrangement / handled, I will informed the factory to prepared the specify samples and provide them a delivery note send the samples to the customer office directly after the mass production is no problem. The customer will allocate the sample and send 2pcs to their US office by themselves. Finally, I will return the receipt to our marketing department for their reference.

I have highlighted some areas where you have errors.

If you want to try again with different words, please post again and we will give you more help.

Best wishes, Clive
Hi Clive,

Thanks for your correction.

This is my revsion. Could you please review again and correct me when you have time. Thank you very much

My answer was not totally correct when you asked me about the procedure of the samples to ABC customer last Friday, because I confused it with an order for BCD customer. I would like to revise it. I will inform the factory to prepare the specified samples and will provide them with a delivery note. To send the samples to the customer's office directly after production is no problem. The customer will allocate the sample and send 2 pcs to their US office themselves. Finally, I will return the receipt to our marketing department for their reference.
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Hi Clive

My answer is not totally correct when you asked me about the procedure of the samples to ABC customer on last Friday.

Just to confirm: It should be 'last Friday' with 'on' omitted.
Hi again,

Thanks for your correction. This is my revsion. Could you please review again and correct me when you have time. Thank you very much

My answer was not totally correct when you asked me about the procedure of the samples to ABC customer last Friday, because I confused it with an order for BCD customer. I would like to revise it. I will inform the factory to prepare the specified samples and will provide them with a delivery note. To send the samples to the customer's office directly after production is no problem. The customer will allocate the sample and send 2 pcs to their US office themselves. Finally, I will return the receipt to our marketing department for their reference.

This is much, much better.Emotion: smile

The meaning of the phrase in pink is not clear to me. Do you mean 'the procedure for sending samples to'?

Instead of 'ABC customer', say 'customer ABC' or perhaps just 'ABC'.

Hi Yong Liat, I was highlighting some of the main areas, and not all mistakes. Thanks for the additional comment.

Best wishes, Clive
Thanks for your help Clive
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Hi Clive,

How about this 2nd revision : My answer was not totally correct when you asked me about the procedure for the samples to ABC last Friday. Because I mixed up the step with BCD. I would like to revise it for you again. For my previous handling, I will ask the factory to prepare the specify samples and provide them a delivery note and send the samples to ABC's office directly when there is no problem in mass production. ABC will allocate the sample and send 2pcs to their US office by themselves. Finally, I will return the receipt to our marketing department for their reference.

Please help me again when you have time. Thanks !

Hi,

It's better again. Here are a few more edits.

Clive

My answer was not totally correct when you asked me about the procedure for sending (?) the samples to ABC last Friday. Because I mixed this up with the steps for BCD. I would like to revise it for you again. For my previous handling, I will ask the factory to prepare the specified samples and provide them a delivery note and send the samples to ABC's office directly when there is no problem in mass production. ABC will allocate the samples and send 2pcs to their US office by themselves. Finally, I will return the receipt to our marketing department for their reference.
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