Nowadays, radio is being replaced by TV and the Internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this idea.

Although TV and the internet are very popular and useful nowadays, radio is still useful and can not be replaced. Wherever you are, whenever it is, whatever you are doing, you can easily listen to radio.

Actually, radio is so convenient. It is easy to listen to radio while doing other things. An example, you can not watch TV or use the internet when you are driving or cooking. But you would like to update news, to listen to some hits of music; radio would be your choice.

Moreover, radio is very cheap and easy to use. Unfortunately, useful information technologies, such as television and internet, are till luxurious things to poor areas which are widely in the world. Radio is an appropriate choice.

Especially, no matter your place, no matter your time, you can easily update any information with a radio. You are very busy, you can not spend time to sit front of TV or computer, listen to radio, and it provides you many interesting programs all the time. Even though you live in a remote region without internet and television, you would not be left behind if you have a radio. I am living a modern city; I have TV and use internet everyday. But I usually listen to radio, I like it.

In order to update information people nowadays have many choices. Watching TV and accessing the internet are very popular ways, but radio can not be replaced, it is still a important way, a rich information source.
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Although TV and the internet are very popular and useful nowadays, radio is still useful and can not be replaced. Wherever you are, whatever you are doing, you can easily listen to the radio.

In actual fact, radio is so convenient. It is easy to listen to radio while doing other things. for example, you can not watch TV or use the internet when you are driving or cooking. But you would like to know the latest news or listen to some hit music; radio would be your choice.

Moreover, radio is very cheap and easy to use. However, unfortunately, useful information technologies, such as television and internet, are still too expensive for those who live in poor areas to buy. Radio could be an appropriate choice for them.

Especially, no matter your place, no matter your time, you can easily get any information through a radio. You don’t have any time to sit in front of a TV set or a computer, whereas radio provides you many interesting programs all the time.

Even though you live in a remote region without internet and a television, you would not be left behind if you have a radio. I am living a modern city; I have TV and use internet everyday. But I usually listen to radio because I like it.

In order to get more information people nowadays have many choices. Watching TV and accessing the internet are very popular ways, but radio can not be replaced, it is still a rich information source as well as an important way to get information.
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DragontvI changed my above essay like that. Could any one give me some advices. Thanks in advaced!

Although TV and the internet are very popular and useful nowadays, radio is still useful and can not be replaced. Wherever you are, whatever you are doing, you can easily listen to the radio.

In actual fact, radio is so convenient. It is easy to listen to radio (only one?) while doing other things. for example, you can not watch TV or use the internet when you are driving or cooking. But if you would like to know the latest news or listen to some hit music; radio would be your choice.

Moreover, radio is very cheap and easy to use. However, (Wrong transitional word) unfortunately, useful information technologies, such as television and internet, are still too expensive for those who live in poor areas to buy. Radio could be an appropriate choice for them.

Especially, no matter your place, no matter your time, you can easily obtain any information through a radio. You don’t have any time to sit in front of a TV set or a computer, whereas radio provides you (prep.) many interesting programs all the time.

Even though you live in a remote region without internet or a television, you would not be left behind if you have a radio. I am living (prep) a modern city; I have TV and use internet (parallel) everyday (one word or two?). But I usually listen to the radio because I like it.

In order to get more information people nowadays have many choices. Watching TV and accessing the internet are two very popular ways, but radio can not be replaced, it is still a rich information source as well as an important way to get information (saying the same thing twice).
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