Hi mentor,

I am a guy who is coping with gaining an iternational intership! I am not that accostumed to letter writing, however I am conscious the better the letter the more the chance I get the position! Could u check if grammar and the use of english fit!

Thank a million

DanieleEmotion: smile

Dear…

Thank you for accepting my application for an internship at XXXX. Your commitment to ease the mission of western companies which cannot speak for themselves within Russian market inspires me. Indeed, I want to support your clients and learn about the international process from the inside.

This is an Italian student of twenty five years old who is attending a Master in International Management organized by a three Institutes partnership, namely the University of Bologna in Italy, ICN Graduate Business School in France and the University MGIMO in Russia. The course focuses on business administration, management at an international level, and the methodology of research and consultancy. Taking several classes into finance and banking, international business management techniques, marketing and strategy planning, international law and international contracting enables me to understand and craft international management processes starting from the stage of planning to the stage of implementing them. Furthermore, studying four months at MGIMO grants me the possibility to be accustomed to Russian market and its peculiar international trade partners. Discovering and, then, handling business Russian opportunities, which many western companies rise to challenge, are the acquiring capabilities this course is aiming to build.

Since the very beginning of my studies, I have never lost sight of my long term goal: to become an internationalization promoter who attains a management position in a international consultancy firms. More in details, I have always been fascinated by gaining international experience regarding enter market strategy and its implementation process into Russia market. In doing so, it is of paramount importance to gain analytical as well as practical insight into these issues, in which your companies daily succeed in. Particularly, I am eager to learn and handle with all about the so called best practices which seems to lead the way of going international and I am confident that no one better than XXXX can enable me to do that. Moreover, XXXX particularly attracts me owing to its focus upon Russian market and scope for strategy-marketing assignments. Your emphasis on client satisfaction is, nonetheless, particularly appealing.

Inclination to interpersonal relationships, sensibility for international cultures market orientation, capability to cope with various situations and problems related to the international business environment and, eventually, orientation to team working and management by objectives are my peculiar characteristics. Moreover, my high motivation toward building a precise professionalism as well as my natural easiness toward cross cultural experience will be beneficial to XXXX.

Being entailed at XXXX, which is well known for its outstanding working standards, represents a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity for me to gain necessary knowledge and experience. Furthermore, I am convinced this opportunity would be the perfect place to prepare myself to face the challenges of the business world across Russia.

I hope that, on consideration of my CV, you will be persuaded of my potential to perform well on this training internship and to make a real contribution as a member of your firm. I am pleased to supply further information in support of my application and look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,
I'm confused. It sounds as though you have already been awarded the internship. Exactly what are you applying for here?
Right you are, it's not that clear. The frist sentence is misleading. Actually, I didn't gain the internship yet. I am attanding a master and I would like to cover an internship postion at a international consulting firm in Russia. Moreover, I am going to "promote" myself, so this letter is going to be the first contact with the company. I used the phrase "Thank you for accepting my application for an internship at ***" eaither to enphatise the fact that my work may be beneficial to the firm or to write something more attracting than "I am writing to gain an internship postion at XXX"! However, I understnad that it sounds arrogant and I'd appreciate your advise.

Thanks a million

Daniele
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Your letter is a bit long and I do not have an infinite amount of time; hence, I have only commented on an excerpt.

I have used bold text to highlight my corrections. Underlined phrases could be rephrased.

I wish you a prosperous 2006 Emotion: smile
Blasfy80Thank you for accepting my application for an internship at XXXX. Your commitment to easing the mission of Western companies which cannot speak for themselves within Russian market inspires me. Indeed, I want to support your clients and learn about the international process from the inside.

Firstly, I shall introduce myself. I am an Italian student of twenty-five years old who is attending a Master in International Management organized by a three Institutes partnership , namely the University of Bologna in Italy, ICN Graduate Business School in France and the University MGIMO (What is the full name of this school? Use its full name and put the acronym between parentheses the first time) in Russia. The course focuses on business administration, management at an international level, and the methodology of research and consultancy. Taking several classes in finance and banking, international business management techniques, marketing and strategy planning, international law and international contracting enables me to understand and craft international management processes starting from the stage of planning to the stage of implementing them. Furthermore, having studied four months at MGIMO grants me the ability of being accustomed to Russian market and its peculiar international trade partners. Discovering and, then, handling business Russian opportunities, which many Western companies rise to challenge, are the acquiring capabilities this course is aiming to build. (You could emphasise that you have actually acquired these skills there instead of that they tried to teach you that)

Since the very beginning of my studies, I have never lost sight of my long-term goal: to become an internationalization promoter who attains a management position in an international consultancy firm. More detailedly, I have always been fascinated by gaining international experience regarding enter market strategy and its implementation process into Russia market. In doing so, it is of paramount importance to gain analytical as well as practical insight into these issues, in which your companies daily succeed in. (Redundant) Particularly, I am eager to learn and handle with all about the so-called "best practices" which seem to lead the way of going international. (A full stop here) I am confident that no one can enable me to do that better than XXXX . Moreover, XXXX particularly attracts me owing to its focus upon Russia's market and scope for strategy-marketing assignments. Your emphasis on client satisfaction is, nonetheless, particularly appealing.

Thank you so much for the feedbacks.

I have just reviewed the letter! Concerning the last sentences of the first paragraph, the point is that I am going to MGIMO Universtity, I haven't gone yet. That's why I wrote "studying at" instead of "having studied" and I would like to emphasise the knowledge and skills I'm going to gain but I haven't acuired them yet. For the rest, I made the corrections u advised me.

Could u check if it sounds better!

thanks

I am interested in applying for an internship position at XXX for the period XX to YY. Your commitment to easing the mission of Western companies which cannot speak for themselves within Russian market inspires me. Indeed, I want to support your clients and learn about the international process from the inside.

Firstly, I shall introduce myself. I am an Italian student of twenty-five years old who is attending a Master in International Management organized by the University of Bologna in Italy, ICN Graduate Business School in France and the Moscow State Institute of International Relations (MGIMO) in Russia.Taking several classes in finance and banking, international business management techniques, marketing and strategy planning, international law and international contracting enables me to understand and craft international management processes starting from the stage of planning to the stage of implementing them. Furthermore, studying four months at MGIMO grants me the ability of being accustomed to Russian market and its peculiar international trade partners. Discovering and, then, handling business Russian opportunities, which many Western companies rise to challenge, are the acquiring capabilities this course is aiming to build.

Since the very beginning of my studies, I have never lost sight of my long-term goal: to become an internationalization promoter who attains a management position in an international consultancy firm. More detailedly, I am fascinated by gaining international experience for developing and monitoring business strategy to enter Russia's market. Aiming to deeply learn and handle with the so-called "best practices" which seem to lead the way of going internationa, I am confident that no one can enable me to do that better than *** Moreover, *** particularly attracts me owing to its focus upon Russia's market and scope for strategy-marketing assignments. Your emphasis on client satisfaction is, nonetheless, particularly appealing.

Inclination to interpersonal relationships, sensibility for international cultures market orientation, capability to cope with various situations and problems related to the international business environment and, eventually, orientation to team working and management by objectives are my peculiar characteristics. Moreover, my high motivation toward building a precise professionalism as well as my natural easiness toward cross cultural experience will be beneficial to ***.
Being entailed at ***, which is well known for its outstanding working standards, represents a once-in-a-lifetime opportunity for me to gain necessary knowledge and experience. I hope that, on consideration of my CV, you will be persuaded of my potential to perform well on this training internship and to make a real contribution as a member of your firm. I am pleased to supply further information in support of my application and look forward to hearing from you.

Sincerely,