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Write an essay at least 250 words about your hobby

We all know what hobbies are, those fun activities we love to partake on just to distract ourselves from the stresses of life. Hobbies make us feel rejuvenated and satisfied, even when our lives are going through some disappointing phase. My favourite hobby is traveling.

Travelling is one of those few activities that has a kind of reset button in our lives. You go away for a few days or weeks and come back fresh and ready to take on challenges of life head on. Travelling to many people is a matter of convenience, rather than a recreation activity. They only travel when they have an issue to attend to. Travelling is also not for escapists, as many people tend to believe. I used the word ‘escapists’ not in the literary sense of the word, but rather to mean people who run away from their problems. Travelling is a hobby like any other.

Travelling has always been part of our family tradition. My parents taught us from an early age the value of taking vacations at least once a year. Though they wished we could go for many trips annually, we were not well off financially and my parents had to work creatively with the little they had, sometimes saving the whole year for a single trip. We could have used credit cards, but that would have only plunged us into more financial woes. My father was very strict when it came to finances and he cautioned us against using debt to purchase luxuries. If we wanted something, then it was up to us to find creative and legal ways of making money to purchase it.

Although we did not have much, money was never an excuse for him. My parents found creative ways to work within the budget. For instance, we would drive to our destination instead of flying and we would carry my mom’s homemade meals. Rarely did we use credit cards and if we did, it was a matter of life and death. Therefore, most of our vacations were during the December holidays. Those were the best days of my life. They were also the days that our family bonds were strengthened. We would fight and quarrel, but in the end we always came back together and worked things out.

I occasionally go for vacations for the sole reason of learning different cultures and interacting with different people to get ideas for my literary work. Furthermore, being away from home really makes you appreciate it even more. The feeling you get after a vacation when you settle down on your couch and just relax is priceless. Travelling makes you appreciate people, their cultures and above all, it makes you appreciate your life and the little you have.

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You wrote 460 words. When the instructions say "at least 250 words," your target should be 280-300, not excessively long.

Also, you do not focus on your hobby. Instead you talk in general about hobbies (mentioning other people, not you.)

Then you write about family and finances and credit cards. Most of your essay was not about your personal hobby and your experiences, so you did not follow the instructions very accurately.

When writing about travel as a hobby, I expect to read about a memorable trip. Where did you go? Who went with you? Did you take a lot of pictures and use them to remember your adventure? How do you share your travel experience with others? What was the best and worst things that happened? Did something funny happen? How do you plan for your next trips? Do you want to combine your hobby with a career and work in the travel business? What is the trip of your dreams in the future?



We all know what hobbies are, those fun activities we love to partake in just to distract ourselves from the stresses of life. Hobbies make us feel rejuvenated and satisfied, even when our lives are going through some disappointing phase. My favourite hobby is traveling.

Travelling is one of those few activities that has a kind of reset button in our lives. You (The instructions were to write about your hobby, not about others. Use the first person throughout your essay. ) go away for a few days or weeks and come back fresh and ready to take on challenges of life head on. Travelling to many people is a matter of convenience, rather than a recreation activity. They only travel when they have an issue to attend to. Travelling is also not for escapists, as many people tend to believe. I use the word ‘escapists’ not in the literary sense of the word, but rather to mean people who run away from their problems. Travelling is a hobby like any other.

Travelling has always been part of our family tradition. My parents taught us from an early age the value of taking vacations at least once a year. Though they wished we could go for many trips annually, we were not well off financially and my parents had to work creatively with the little they had, sometimes saving the whole year for a single trip. We could have used credit cards, but that would have only plunged us into more financial woes. My father was very strict when it came to finances and he cautioned us against using debt to purchase luxuries. If we wanted something, then it was up to us to find creative and legal ways of making money to purchase it.

That is off-topic. Just write about your hobby, not family finances and credit cards.

Although we did not have much, money was never an excuse for him. My parents found creative ways to work within the budget. For instance, we would drive to our destination instead of flying and we would carry my mom’s homemade meals. Rarely did we use credit cards and if we did, it was a matter of life and death. Therefore, most of our vacations were during the December holidays. Those were the best days of my life. They were also the days that our family bonds were strengthened. We would fight and quarrel, but in the end we always came back together and worked things out.

I occasionally go for vacations for the sole reason of learning different cultures and interacting with different people to get ideas for my literary work. Furthermore, being away from home really makes you appreciate it even more. The feeling you get after a vacation when you settle down on your couch and just relax is priceless. Travelling makes you appreciate people, their cultures and above all, it makes you appreciate your life and the little you have.

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Ninh Giang Thank you very much for your feedback. I have understood my mistakes.

That's great!

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I will rewrite it and please review mine once again. Thank you.

This is my second try. I hope it will be better. Thank you for your help.

We all know that every single person on this planet all have hobbies.
Those wonderful activities help you to relieve all your stress and prevent
you from being a person with sadness and sorrow. For me, my favorite
hobby is traveling,
I love to travel without a group and without a guide, despite the fact
that I often find myself in a difficult situation in unfamiliar places.
Usually, I travel with my family or with my friends. Most of all
transportation , I like to travel by car and spend a little time at different
places. Although long journeys are tiring for me sometimes, but that
does not stop me. First of all, it is always nice to stay in a different place
for a change. Secondly, I am interested in seeing new sights, exploring
different cultures and such. Third, I love to spend time in beautiful
places and admire the beauty of the natural attractions, such as
mountains, waterfalls, forest lakes, seas and oceans, forests, valleys,
hills, etc. I have been in the mountains with my friends many times.
Also, I have visited some South east Asia countries such as Bangkok,
Seoul, Boracay, and in other cities. I remembered last year, I went to
America with my family and we stayed there for two weeks and it was
the most memorable experience in my life. Although it was not cheap
but we still managed not to blow all our budget. We went to the
universal studios, visited the Grand Canyon and took many
unforgettable images of this enchanting country. I am going to America
when I am 18 because I am in love with it.
Traveling gives me a good opportunity to learn a lot about the history
of the country I visit, to see cultural and historical places, to meet
people of different nationalities, and to learn a lot about their
traditions, customs and culture. In other words. I can expand my
worldview and my mind. In the future I am going to visit many countries
of the world, in various remote and wild places with beautiful scenery
such as Colombia, Cambodia, Malaysia, Brazil and Nepal.

Ninh GiangWe all know that every single person on this planet all have hobbies.

That is ungrammatical. Single person / all do not match. Besides, you used "all" twice in the same sentence.

  • We all know that every person on this planet has a hobby.

But I really can't be sure of that. My nephew Blake is a person. He was born two days ago, and only sleeps, nurses, and poops. He does not have a hobby. There are many more people like him!

I think I have falsified your statement. The moral is not to make such broad generalizations.


Most people, if they can afford it, have one or more hobbies which take up their leisure time. These Those wonderful activities help you to relieve all your their stress and prevent you them from being sad and sorrowful. a person with sadness and sorrow. For me, my favorite hobby is traveling, (wrong punctuation)


When you start an essay with third person (he, she, it, they) , do not switch to second person (you) in the following sentence. Stick with the same pronoun.

You should avoid repeating words. You used "all" three times in that short paragraph.


I love to travel without a group and without a guide, even though despite the fact that I often find myself in a difficult situation in unfamiliar places. Usually, I travel with my family or with my friends. Most of all
transportation , (unnatural) I like to travel by car and spend a little time at different places along the way to our destination. Although long journeys can be are tiring for me sometimes, but (Wrong usage. "although" and "but" mean the same thing. But is a coordinating conjunction.) that does not stop me.


Ninh GiangAlthough long journeys are tiring for me sometimes, but that does not stop me.

Correction:

Although these long journeys can sometimes be tiring, that does not stop me.

Long journeys can sometimes be tiring, but that does not stop me.



First of all, it is always nice to stay in a different place for a change. Secondly, Second, I am interested in seeing new sights, exploring different cultures and such. Third, I love to spend time in beautiful places and admire the beauty of the natural attractions, such as mountains, waterfalls, forest lakes, seas and oceans, forests, valleys,
hills, etc.

"Such as" and "etc." do not go together. "etc." is redundant, since "such as" is a list of exemplars, not a complete list. Besides, do not use "etc." in formal essays. It shows that the writer is not thinking completely.

Also, do not use "first, second, third" for such a short list. It is distracting.

Ninh GiangFirst of all, it is always nice to stay in a different place for a change. Secondly, I am interested in seeing new sights, exploring different cultures and such. Third, I love to spend time in beautiful places and admire the beauty of the natural attractions, such as mountains, waterfalls, forest lakes, seas and oceans, forests, valleys,hills, etc. .

Long journeys can sometimes be tiring, but that does not stop me. I get recharged from changes in scenery, especially staying in different places, seeing new sights and exploring different cultures and traditions. However, I like dallying in beautiful places, admiring the beauty of the natural attractions, such as mountains, waterfalls, forest lakes, seas and oceans, forests, valleys, and even low hills.


There is a paragraph break here because you change the subject. Pleas post your essays with clear paragraph breaks.

I have been in the mountains with my friends many times.
Also, I have visited some South east Asia countries in Southeast Asia such as Bangkok,
Seoul, Boracay, and in other cities. (Cities are not countries.) I remembered (wrong tense.) last year, (comma splice error) I went to America with my family and we stayed there for two weeks and it was
the most memorable experience in my life. (This sentence is too long with so many "and"s.) Although it was not cheap but we still managed not to blow all our budget. We went to the universal studios, Proper nouns must be capitalized) visited the Grand Canyon and took many unforgettable photographs / photos/ pictures images of this enchanting country. I am going to return to America when I am 18 because I am in love with it.


Traveling gives me a good opportunity to learn a lot about the history
of the country I visit, to see cultural and historical places, to meet
people of different nationalities, and to learn a lot about their
traditions, customs and culture. In other words. I can expand my
worldview and my mind. In the future I am going to visit many countries
of the world, in various remote and wild places with beautiful scenery
such as Colombia, Cambodia, Malaysia, Brazil and Nepal are at the top of my bucket list.


Your essay lacks a conclusion paragraph. In the conclusion, you restate the main points and your thesis. You do not add any new information.

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Thank you so much for your valuable correction. I am very grateful for your help.

This is conclusion for my essay. Can you help me, please?

In conlusion, travelling is one of my best hobbies in my life, which brings me a great deal of pleasure and excitement.

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