Hello everyone,

Hope I'll get some help here...
Deadline is in 4 days for my application...
Thank you in advance if you'd considerate my message...

So, I'm writting a Motivation Letter for EVS

and can't help with right grammar and many more :/...

I'd be really thankull if you could check and and help me with my letter:

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Motivation Letter



Hello, my name is -- --. I am from -- -- and with this letter I would like to apply for --- project n. ---.

I decided to apply for this program as it perfectly fits my interests and provides knowledge and experience, which I am looking for, at the moment. I am a --(proession)--- and am going to be an --(profession). It is very important for me to be acquainted with child and youth psychology, to have good communication and interpersonal competences… This side of my profession is as much important for me as another, purely technical side.

On the other hand, I am a very enthusiastic, creative person with wide variety of interests and have a veritable experience in the field of youth in action activities. I like being involved in various activities which are not only enjoyable but also bring some interesting experiences, skills and competences.

I frankly love communicating with children and young people. It’s amazing how they see the world and how different and interesting they are. I strongly believe that every person is unique and love discovering and revealing one’s individuality.

All along my studies I’ve always been involved in activities related to the art. During two semesters I studied at -- --. where I have learned allot. For me this was the opportunity to accomplish my dreams and inspirations, to explore and structure my hobbies. In a spare time I make accessories: scarps, jewelry, toys… with different materials: felt, clay, some little jewelry details… I also make serigraphic/stencil drawings on t-shirts, bags, tableware… I am also a freelance makeup artist: In a spare time I work for “-- --” as a volunteer and give make up tutorial trainings). I can also consider cooking as one of my hobbies. I like --(country) -- food and can make many specialties of it. I also enjoy trying new culinary experiences.

Besides, in the meanwhile of my undergraduate studies I was an editor of -- --. My role generally was to provide information and to make a good communication between students and our organization, including running a bilingual web page. A very important benefit of our organization was an exchange program. We were accepting and sending students from/to many countries (Hungary, Poland, Czech Republic, Slovenia, Slovakia, Turkey, Estonia, Ukraine, Macedonia, Italy, Egypt...). We were organizing different events for incoming students and of course enjoying having time together.

Moreover, I was one of the coordinators and participants of:

“-- --” camp;

And “-- -- ”

So my experiences in all above mentioned fields make me think that I would fit perfectly with the volunteer activities of -- --.

On the other hand, it would be useful and interesting for children to get in touch with my different culture. --(country) -- isn't well known in European countries, though we have very interesting historical heredity and traditions, so I would like to provide my knowledge and experience in this project.

I’d like to zoom on my interest in --- (country): I fall in love with everything ---(country)-- when I was a 1st year student. The story is a little bit long, pathetic and teenage-like. (Maybe I’ll share it in the clubs of -- -- if I’d have this opportunity. Teenagers appreciate particularly, every time I tell it). Soon I made an internship in -- --. Even though it was a short term (2weeks) program, I’m very glad and proud that I’ve visited “-- --” and have had an opportunity to experience ---(country)-- culture and life from close. So I can speak a very little bit of ---(language)-- and am highly motivated to learn it better.

Consequently, I find a real match between my interests, motivation, experience and volunteers’ role in the -- --.

I am ready to learn and it would be a truly valuable opportunity for me if you would give me a chance to contribute to this project. I believe that this cooperation would be a mutual enriching experience.

Yours faithfully,

-- --

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I'm not sure about leaving all that story of "fallig in love" in this letter, it sounds familiar :-?
and besides, I have many solid grammar mistakes I guess :-?

I DO need HELP Emotion: sad
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Hi aethairnithy,

Your letter needs more structure. You use a lot of connecting phrases, but they sound out of place because the overall letter lacks a framework. The opening paragraph should give the reader an idea what you are going to present. The next paragraphs should give the details.

The concluding paragraph whould wrap up and give a strong motivating conclusion.

I have made some detailed suggestions, mainly on the first few paragraphs.

Motivation Letter

Hello, my name is You don't need to put your name, country and other contact information here. It will be on your application). I am from and with this letter I would like to apply for project n. .

I decided to apply for this program as it perfectly fits my interests and provides knowledge and experience--, which I am looking for, at the moment--. (This is a very weak sentence. Make it more appealing to the reader. I am a (profession) and am going to be an (profession). It is very important for me to obtain more experience in the field of --be acquainted-- with child and youth psychology, to have develop good communication and interpersonal skills --competences…--. This side of my profession is as much important for me as the --another, purely technical-- academic side.
--On the other hand,-- I am a very enthusiastic and creative person with wide variety of interests and have --a-- veritable experience in the field of youth in action activities (give a specific list here). I like being involved in various activities which are not only enjoyable but also bring some interesting experiences, skills and competences. (repetitive)
I frankly love communicating with children and young people. It’s amazing how they see the world and how different and interesting they are. I strongly believe that every person is unique and love discovering and revealing one’s individuality.
All along my studies I’ve always been involved in activities related to the art. During two semesters I studied at . where I have learned allot(this does not say much at all) . For me this was the opportunity to accomplish my dreams and inspirations, to explore and structure my hobbies. In my spare time I make accessories such as scarps, jewelry, and toys with different materials: felt, clay, some little jewelry details(? beads, string, plastic ornaments)(You motivation letter should not have any elipses or "etc." in it. That is weak.) I also make serigraphic/stencil drawings on t-shirts, bags, tableware… I am also a freelance makeup artist: In my spare time I work for “ ” as a volunteer and give make up tutorials --trainings)--. I can also consider cooking as one of my hobbies. I like (country) food and can make many special dishes specialties of it. I also enjoy trying new culinary experiences techniques.
Besides, in the meanwhile of During my undergraduate studies I was an editor of . My role generally was to provide information and to provide make a good communication channel between students and our organization(what organization?). My experience included including running a bilingual web page. A very important benefit of our organization was an exchange program. We were accepting and sending students from/to many countries (Hungary, Poland, Czech Republic, Slovenia, Slovakia, Turkey, Estonia, Ukraine, Macedonia, Italy, Egypt...). We were organizing organized different events for incoming students and of course enjoyed having good times together.
--Moreover,-- I was one of the coordinators and participants of:
“ ” camp;
And “ ”
So my experiences in all above mentioned these fields make me think that I would fit perfectly with the volunteer activities of .
On the other hand, it would be useful and interesting for children to get in touch with my different culture. (country) isn't well known in European countries, though we have very interesting historical heredity and traditions, so I would like to provide my knowledge and experience in this project.
I’d like to zoom on my interest in (country): I fall in love with everything (country)-- when I was a 1st year student. The story is a little bit long, pathetic and teenage-like. (Maybe I’ll share it in the clubs of if I’d have this opportunity. Teenagers appreciate particularly, every time I tell it). Soon I made an internship in . Even though it was a short term (2weeks) program, I’m very glad and proud that I’ve visited “ ” and have had an opportunity to experience (country) culture and life from close. So I can speak a very little bit of (language) and am highly motivated to learn it better.
Consequently, I find a real match between my interests, motivation, experience and volunteers’ role in the .
I am ready to learn and it would be a truly valuable opportunity for me if you would give me a chance to contribute to this project. I believe that this cooperation would be a mutually enriching experience.

Yours faithfully,

__

I'm not sure about leaving all that story of "fallig in love" in this letter, it sounds familiar :-?and besides, I have many solid grammar mistakes I guess :-?
I DO need HELP Emotion: sad[/quote]
Thank you soo much, AlpheccaStars Emotion: smile

You did help ! I will consider your advices Emotion: smile

Still open to more corrections ! [A]
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I made some corrections, but still doesn't feel like to be good enough :/

Motivation Letter





Hello, my name is ___ (well, as there's no application and we send only motivation letter and CV, I left this phrase). I am from _ and with this letter I would like to apply for __ project n.

When I first found about this program, I realized that it was my opportunity to acquire professional knowledge and skills in my field of study. I am a ___. It is very important for me to be acquainted with child and youth psychology, to obtain more experience and develop good communication and interpersonal skills. This side of my profession is as much important for me as the another, purely academic side.

I am a very enthusiastic and creative person with wide variety of interests and have veritable experience in the field of youth animation. I like being involved in various activities which are not only enjoyable but also bring some interesting experiences, skills and competences. I frankly love communicating with children and young people. It’s amazing how they see the world and how different and interesting they are. I strongly believe that every person is unique and love discovering and revealing one’s individuality.

All along my studies I’ve always been involved in activities related to the art. During two semesters I studied at “__”, where I have learned various objects: construction of accessories, crafts/craft design, __ folk Art and artisanry, fine arts/composition, makeup art and techniques, history of art. For me this was the opportunity to accomplish my dreams and inspirations, to explore and structure my hobbies. In my spare time I make accessories such as: scarves, jewelry and toys with different materials: felt, clay, beads, string, plastic ornaments. I also make serigraphic/stencil drawings on t-shirts, bags and tableware. Besides, I am a freelance makeup artist: In my spare time I work for “__” as a volunteer and give make up tutorials). I also consider cooking as one of my hobbies. I like __ food and can make many special dishes of it. I also enjoy trying new culinary techniques.

During my undergraduate studies I was an editor of ___ Association. My role generally was to provide a good communication channel between students and our organization. My experience included running a bilingual web page. A very important benefit of our organization was an exchange program. We were accepting and sending students from/to many countries (Czech Republic, Estonia, Egypt, Germany, Hungary, Italy, Lithuania, Macedonia, Poland, Slovenia, Slovakia, Turkey and Ukraine). We organized different events for incoming students and of course enjoyed having good times together.

I was one of the coordinators and participants of:

“___” camp, which takes place every 1st of June in our university;

And “___”

So my experiences in all these fields make me think that I would fit perfectly with the volunteer activities of ___.

On the other hand, it would be useful and interesting for children to get in touch with my different culture. ___ isn't well known in European countries, though we have very interesting historical heredity and traditions, so I would like to provide my knowledge and experience in this project.

I’d like to zoom on my interest in __(country): I fall in love with everything __ when I was a 1st year student. The story is a little bit long, pathetic and teenage-like. (Maybe I’ll share it in the clubs of __ if I’d have this opportunity. Teenagers appreciate particularly, every time I tell it). Soon I made an internship in ___. Even though it was a short term (2weeks) program, I’m very glad and proud that I’ve visited “___univeristy” and have had an opportunity to experience __ culture and life from close. So I can speak a very little bit of ___and am highly motivated to learn it better.

Consequently, I find a real match between my interests, motivation, experience and volunteers’ role in the ___. That is why I think that I am the exact candidate for this project.

I am ready to learn and it would be a truly valuable opportunity for me if you would give me a chance to contribute to this project ( I can't help repeating this word :/ ). I believe that this cooperation would be a mutually enriching experience.

Yours faithfully,

----

so, what about the lack of framworks :-?
and the last paragraphs: talking about falling in love with that country's culture.. sounds very familiar, right?
I made some corrections, but still doesn't feel like to be good enough :/

Yes, it still needs some more work.

Motivation Letter

Hello, my name is ___ (well, as there's no application and we send only motivation letter and CV, I left this phrase _ It is still a pretty weak way to start, and your name will be on your CV.). I am from _ and with this letter I would like to apply for __ project n.
When I first found about this program, I realized that it was my opportunity to acquire professional knowledge and skills in my field of study. I am a ___. It is very important for me to be acquainted with child and youth psychology, to obtain more experience and develop good communication and interpersonal skills. This side (The practical side, or honing my skills as a practitioner, is as important as book-learning.) of my profession is as much important for me as the another, purely academic side.
I am a very enthusiastic and creative person with wide variety of interests and have veritable experience in the field of youth animation(? animation is to make cartoons). I like being involved in various activities which are not only enjoyable but also bring some interesting experiences, skills and competences. I frankly love communicating with children and young people. It’s amazing how they see the world and how different and interesting they are. I strongly believe that every person is unique and love discovering and revealing one’s individuality. (This paragraph can be shortened - it is rambling a bit.)
All along my studies I’ve always been involved in activities related to the arts. (or related to art , related to arts and crafts.) During two semesters I studied at “___”, where I have learned various objects(? wrong word): construction of accessories, crafts/craft design, ___ folk Art and artisanry, fine arts/composition, makeup art and techniques, history of art. For me this was the opportunity to accomplish (fulfil?) my dreams and inspirations, to explore the craftmanship behind and structure my hobbies. In my spare time I make accessories such as: scarves, jewelry and toys with different materials: felt, clay, beads, string, and plastic ornaments. I also make serigraphic/stencil drawings on t-shirts, bags and tableware. Besides, I am a freelance makeup artist: In my spare time I work for “__” as a volunteer and give make up tutorials). I also consider cooking as one of my hobbies. I like __ food and can make many special dishes of it. I also enjoy trying new culinary techniques.
During my undergraduate studies I was an editor of ___ Association (editor is related to a publication, like a newpaper, book or magazine). My role generally was to provide a good communication channel between students and our organization. My experience included running a bilingual web page. A very important benefit of our organization was an exchange program. We were accepting and sending students from/to many countries (Czech Republic, Estonia, Egypt, Germany, Hungary, Italy, Lithuania, Macedonia, Poland, Slovenia, Slovakia, Turkey and Ukraine). We organized different events for incoming students and of course enjoyed having good times together.
I was one of the coordinators and participants of:
“___” camp, which takes place every 1st of June in our university;
And “___”
So my past experiences in all these fields make me think that I would fit perfectly with the volunteer activities of ___.
On the other hand, it would be useful and interesting for children to get in touch with my different culture. ___ isn't well known in European countries, though we have very interesting historical heredity and traditions, so I would like to provide my knowledge and experience in this project.
I’d like to zoom on my interest in __(country): I fall in love with everything __ when I was a 1st year student. The story is a little bit long, pathetic and teenage-like. (Maybe I’ll share it in the clubs of ___ if I’d have this opportunity. Children, particularly teenagers in appreciate it every time I tell it). Soon (soon means in the future, not the past) Recently I made completed an internship in ___. Even though it was a short term (2-week) program, I’m very glad and proud that I’ve visited “___univeristy” and have had an opportunity to experience ___ culture and life from up close. So I can speak a very little bit of ___and am highly motivated to learn it better.
Consequently, I find a real match between my interests, motivation, experience and volunteers’ role in the ___. That is why I think that I am the exact candidate for this project.
I am ready to learn and it would be a truly valuable opportunity for me if you would give me a chance to contribute to this project ( I can't help repeating this word :/ Just leave it out, then.). I believe that this cooperation would be a mutually enriching experience.
Yours faithfully,
----
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I honestly appriciate your help ! So happy that I found this forum Emotion: poolparty

Well, I'll try...

Motivation Letter

Hello, my name is ___ . I am from _ and with this letter I would like to apply for __ project n.
When I first found about this program, I realized that it was my opportunity to acquire professional knowledge and skills in my field of study. I am a pediatric dental therapist and am going to be an orthodontist. It is very important for me to be acquainted with child and youth psychology, to obtain more experience and develop good communication and interpersonal skills. This part of my job is as much important in my profession as the purely clinical part.
I am a very enthusiastic and creative person with wide variety of interests and have a solid experience in the field of youth activities(but don't know how to deal with the next coming repetition of this word :/ ). I like being involved in various activities which are not only enjoyable but also bring some interesting experiences and skills. I frankly love communicating with children and young people. It’s amazing how they see the world and how different and interesting they are.
All along my studies I’ve always been involved in activities related to the arts. During two semesters I studied at “___”, where I have learned various subjects (:-?): construction of accessories, crafts/craft design, ___ folk Art and artisanry, fine arts/composition, makeup art and techniques, history of art. For me this was the opportunity to fulfil my dreams and inspirations, to explore the craftmanship behind my hobbies. In my spare time I make accessories such as: scarves, jewelry and toys with different materials: felt, clay, beads, string and plastic ornaments. I also make serigraphic/stencil drawings on t-shirts, bags and tableware. Besides, I am a freelance makeup artist: In my spare time I work for “__” as a volunteer and give make up tutorials). I also consider cooking as one of my hobbies. I like __ food and can make many special dishes of it. I also enjoy trying new culinary techniques.
During my undergraduate studies I was an editor(well, as there was exactly this position in our donor associations from english speaking countries i'd leave that.. if it doesn't sound like great mistake :-?) of ___ Association . My role generally was to provide a good communication channel between students and our organization. My experience included running a bilingual web page. A very important benefit of our association was an exchange program. We were accepting and sending students from/to many countries (Czech Republic, Estonia, Egypt, Germany, Hungary, Italy, Lithuania, Macedonia, Poland, Slovenia, Slovakia, Turkey and Ukraine). We organized different events for incoming students and of course enjoyed having good times together.
I was one of the coordinators and participants of:
“___” camp, which takes place every 1st of June in our university;
And “___”
So my past experiences make me think that I would fit perfectly with the volunteer activities of ___.
On the other hand, it would be useful and interesting for children to get in touch with my different culture. ___ isn't well known in European countries, though we have very interesting historical heredity and traditions, so I would like to provide my knowledge and experience in this project.
I’d like to zoom on my interest in __(country): I fall in love with everything __ when I was a 1st year student. The story is a little bit long, pathetic and teenage-like. (Maybe I’ll share it in the clubs of ___ if I’d have this opportunity. Children, particularly teenagers appreciate it every time I tell it). Recently well, it was in 2007.. right after being interessed in this country.. so.. can I still use "Recently" :-?) I completed an internship in ___. Even though it was a short term (2-week) program, I’m very glad and proud that I’ve visited “___University” and have had an opportunity to experience ___ culture and life from up close. So I can speak a very little bit of ___and am highly motivated to learn it better.
Consequently, I find a real match between my interests, motivation, experience and volunteers’ role in the ___. That is why I think that I am the exact candidate for this project.
I am ready to learn and it would be a truly valuable opportunity for me if you would give me a chance to contribute. I believe that this cooperation would be a mutually enriching experience.
Yours faithfully,

___
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If you like, I can send you my motivation letter. I applied for master's programme at that time.Just let me know.
Soraya90,

awww... That would be really nice and kind Emotion: smile

Thanks in advance Emotion: smile

but I can't write you a private message :-? to give you my e-mail... can't find such function..

Can you write me one, to be able to reply..
aethairnithySoraya90,
awww... That would be really nice and kind Emotion: smile
Thanks in advance Emotion: smile

but I can't write you a private message :-? to give you my e-mail... can't find such function..
Can you write me one, to be able to reply..
aethairnithy - you can put your email address in your user profile. For people's protection, we do not allow email addresses in posts.
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