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Thank you so much for your informative email. I will contact Pushilla and ask her about the accomodation. The thing that made me confused a little bit that my dad will come with me and stay for a few weeks before going to visit his friend in FL, so we might stay at a hotel first. I probably take a stidio after he leaves. Today, I recieved an email from the embassy and asked me to submit a copy of my passport and fill out the form of requesting the approval letter of scholarship, I think my process in underwent now even if I have

not submit the official letter yet. I'm so happy to write this email and inform you, in addition, start plan to my next place to do my master program. Hopefully to get the VISA in the proper time.
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Thank you so much for your informative email. I will contact Pushilla and ask her about the accommodation. The thing that made me confused a little bit was that my dad will come with me and stay for a few weeks before going to visit his friend in FL, so we might stay at a hotel first. I will probably take [find?] a studio after he leaves. Today, I recieved an email from the embassy, which asked me to submit a copy of my passport and fill out the form of requesting the approval letter of scholarship. I think my process [in underwent - is underway?] now even if I have not submitted the official letter yet. I'm so happy to write this email and inform you. In addition, I am starting to plan to my the next place to do my master program. Hopefully, to I will get the VISA in the proper time.

There are other changes you could make to make it more natural. However, I have concentrated on correcting some of the grammar. What you mean is fairly clear, and everyone will have slightly different ideas on how to say these things.
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Also, "recieved" should be "received". The basic rule is "i comes before e, except after c - with exceptions."
Thank you so much free_spirit

I really appreciate your help

Regards