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"The Environment Threat"

There are many things threat the environment in our planet, The Earth. The Earth is the planet which we live on. First of all, some bad behaviors in our life, for example, throw the wastes in public places. Public places as Gardens, Parks, and Beaches. In addition, using The Insect Destructives and hair spry which has CFCs. CFCs is the first enemy for The Ozone Layer. A Second, the personal benefits, for instance, people who cutting forests trees wood because this hurt many kinds of animals like Banda. Another example of the personal benefits is over fishing in Seas, Oceans, and Rivers. The last and most important thing is the chemical victories. This kind of factories increase the polluted gas in air by burning coal and oil and this create bad gas hurt people. Polluted gas brings many kinds of ills of the respirator for people, such as, Cough, and Asthma. Also, some of Chemical factories throw the wastes of it in seas and oceans. As a result, this is our planet, so we have to work to save our home.
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There are many things threat the environment in our planet, The Earth. The Earth is the planet which we live on. First of all, some bad behaviors in our life, for example, throw the wastes in public places. Public places as Gardens, Parks, and Beaches. In addition, using The Insect Destructives and hair spry which has CFCs. CFCs is the first enemy for The Ozone Layer. A Second, the personal benefits, for instance, people who cutting forests trees wood because this hurt many kinds of animals like Banda. Another example of the personal benefits is over fishing in Seas, Oceans, and Rivers. The last and most important thing is the chemical victories. This kind of factories increase the polluted gas in air by burning coal and oil and this create bad gas hurt people. Polluted gas brings many kinds of ills of the respirator for people, such as, Cough, and Asthma. Also, some of Chemical factories throw the wastes of it in seas and oceans. As a result, this is our planet, so we have to work to save our home
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There are many thing Threat the environment in our planet, The Earth. The Earth is the planet which we live on. First of all, some behaviors in our daily life, for example, throw the wastes in public places. Public places as Gardens, Parks, and Beaches. In addition, using The Insect Kills and Hair spry which has CFCs. CFCs is the first enemy for Ozone Layer. A Second, the personal benefits, for instance, people who cutting forests trees wood because this hurt many kinds of animals like Banda. Another example of the personal benefits is overfishing in Seas, Oceans, and Rivers. The last and most important thing is the chemical factories. This kind of factories increase the polluted gas in air by burning coal and oil and this create polluted gas hurt people. Polluted gas brings many kinds of ills of the respirator for people, such as, Cough, and Asthma. Also, some of Chemical factories throw the wastes of it in seas and oceans. As a result, this is our planet, so we have to work to save our home.



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Easter Magic,

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There are many things that threaten the environment of our planet Earth. First of all, the threat comes from some of our behavior patterns in daily life, such as littering public places like gardens, parks and beaches--in addition, using insecticides and hair sprays, which have CFCs. (CFCs are the number one enemy of the ozone layer.) Secondly, there are the actions we take for our personal benefit. For instance, people cut down trees in the forests for the wood. This hurts many kinds of animals, like the Banda. Another example is overfishing in the seas, oceans, and rivers. The last and most important threat comes from the chemical factories. These factories increase the amount of pollutants in the air by burning coal and oil, which is harmful to humans. Pollutants cause many kinds of respiratory problems such as coughing and asthma. Also, some chemical factories dump their waste products in the rivers, seas and oceans. Because this is our home, we have to work to save our planet.
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