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People's opinions differ as to whether or not students should be studied abroad.While there are several strong arguments against them,I still believe that it is an attractive aspect of education. For a substantial number of reasons why people might argue that studying abroad is an unnecessary burden on children.Firstly,If they decide to go to another country,the essential thing that they have to have proficient English.Pupils should spend on effort and persistence to be good at global language.Furthermore , they might be face-to-face culture shocks . For instance, according to the latest news , a variety of students were astonished about the way outperform nations move day by day. In spite of the above arguments,I support the view that studying abroad has had an important role to play in their prospective life.The main benefit when students have a chance to go abroad is that it will encourage independent learning and problem solving as children are challenged to work through obstacles alone and at their own pace.Therefore if they experience in the environment which have a high-quality education system.This will result in a well-educated workforce, and in turn a more productive and prosperous nation.For example, a company owner will need well-qualified and competent staff, and a well-funded education system would provide such employees. In conclusion,while I recognised the possible disadvantages of studying abroad , I still take it into account to be a positive development overall.

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Please tell us the topic or question that you are writing about.


I assume this is an essay. If so, you need to write it in the standard essay format, ie in paragraphs.

You need

an introductory paragraph.

a body paragraph for each of your main points

a conclusion paragraph

Clive

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many thanks for your help.Do you think anything else i should improve?

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what do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad? I'm so sorry.

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what do you think are the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad? I'm so sorry.


Because you lack a good structure, I find it hard to see clearly what your answer is to the topic question.

Your introduction should state your overall answer (in the form of a so-called thesis statement.) It should also state briefly the points that you are now going to discuss in detail.

Each body paragraph should begin with a topic sentence which tells the reader what point you are going to discuss in the paragraph.

Your conclusion should remind the reader briefly of the main points you have discussed, and repeat briefly your overall answer to the topic question.


Here are some quick and brief comments on your text.

It will take you some time to improve your English, but you can start right now to improve your structure.

Clive



People's opinions differ as to whether or not students should study be studied abroad.While there are several strong arguments against them (who or wht is 'them'?) I still believe that it (what does 'it' refer to?) is an attractive aspect of education.

For a substantial number of reasons why people might argue that studying abroad is an unnecessary burden on children. <<<This is a subordinate clause, not a complete sentence

Firstly,If they (who?) decide to go to another country,the essential thing (missing verb) that they have to have proficient English.Pupils should spend on effort and persistence to be good at global language.(what does global language mean?)Furthermore , they might be face-to-face culture shocks . For instance, according to the latest news , a variety of students were astonished about

the way outperform nations move day by day.<<< what does this mean?

In spite of the above arguments,I support the view that studying abroad has had an important role to play in their prospective life.The main benefit when students have a chance to go abroad is that it will encourage independent learning and problem solving as children are challenged to work through obstacles alone and at their own pace.Therefore if they experience in the environment which have a high-quality education system. you need a comma, not a period This will result in a well-educated workforce, and in turn a more productive and prosperous nation.For example, a company owner will need well-qualified and competent staff, and a well-funded education system would provide such employees. In conclusion,while I recognised the possible disadvantages of studying abroad , I still take it into account to be a positive development overall. The question was 'what are the advantages/disadvantages'. It's not enough to just conclude that you recognize them.

Actually I am really grateful when you repair these mistakes.

It's your turn now to try to improve this. If you try, I'll be happy to check it again for you.

Clive

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People's opinions differ as to whether or not students should be studied abroad. While there are several strong arguments against this tendency, I still believe that the development of this approach is an attractive aspect of education. For a substantial number of reasons why people might argue that studying abroad is an unnecessary burden on children because of these below drawbacks. Firstly, if their parents decide to go to another country, the essential thing is that they have to have proficient English. Pupils should spend on effort and persistence to be good at English which one of the most popular languages in the world. Furthermore , they might be face-to-face culture shocks . For instance, according to the latest news, a variety of students were astonished as they live in outperform nations in which the countries is superior to your country in all aspects. In spite of the above arguments, I support the view that studying abroad has had an important role to play in their prospective life. The main benefit when students have a chance to go abroad is that it will encourage independent learning and problem solving as children are challenged to work through obstacles alone and at their own pace. Therefore if they experience in the environment which have a high quality education system, this will result in a well-educated workforce, and in turn a more productive and prosperous nation. For example, a company owner will need well-qualified and competent staff, and a well-funded education system would provide such employees. In conclusion, the positive advantages outweigh the possible disadvantages of studying abroad in my personal opinion. Could you check it again for me?:)

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