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I´m writting a report but I´m not sure if the sentences below sound right. Could you please correct them for me?

1) This will be discussed with the client on the 1st December for his agreement.

2) 9 (out of 14) members of staff attended the presentation.

3) The initiatives, undertaken by the office to prevent polution and to minimise waste, have been recorded since July.

4) Despite the effort of reducing waste, when comparing the quantity of paper purchased (per month) against the quantity of paper disposed (per month), verifies that there is a considerable % of paper being disposed.

5) It would be beneficial to start thinking how effective are the current office initiatives to ensure the minimisation of paper waste.

I really appreciate if you could help me.
Thanks,
Ritinha
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Hi Ritinha,

Here you go:

1) This will be discussed with the client on December 1st.

2) Nine (out of 14) staff members attended the presentation.

3) The initiatives undertaken by the office to prevent pollution and minimise waste have been recorded since July. ['RECORDED' DOESN'T WORK HERE. 'IN PLACE'?]

4) Despite efforts to reduce waste, the quantity of paper disposed of, when compared to the quantity of paper purchased (per month), verifies that there is a considerable percentage of paper being disposed of.

5) It would be beneficial to start considering how effective the current office initiatives are in ensuring the minimisation of paper waste.
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Mister Micawber,
Thanks for your help.
Regarding the sentence 3) I wanted to say that
the initiatives undertaken by the office .... have been recorded on a database since July. Does it make sense now?

Thanks again,
Ritinha
Hi Ritinha,

I think it probably needs the full phrase, then:

3) The initiatives undertaken by the office to prevent pollution and minimise waste have been recorded in the database since July.

('In' the database, I believe, is the correct Computerese.)
Thanks Mister MicawberEmotion: smile
Ritinha
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