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Hi friends,
I am applying for a Research Assistant job.

I need to show that I am/have:
exemply ability to work with numbers and able to manipulate and interprete large volumn of data
Advanced Excel and computer skills.
Attention to detail.
Stong communication skills.

Please help me correct my cover letter. Your comments are highly valued!!! I truly appreciate your time and effort.

Dear Sir/Madam,

As an Honours graduate in [degree], I am writing to apply for the Research Assistant position at [company name]. [company name] is Australia's leading provider of X, Y and Z service. With my experience in research and my discipline knowledge, I will make a positive contribution to the [company name].

In my Honours degree, I conducted an independent research and wrote a thesis based on my findings. This involved literature review, collecting and analysing data, explaining research methodology and reporting statistical results. I have five years' experience of using Excel for building economics/finance models, forecasting conducting data analysis. I also worked for the School of X as a tutor. The teaching and researching experience prepared me with a great deal of people skills, information skills and technical skills. I also demonstrated the ability to present information and ideas effectively in different format through these experiences.

I am accustomed to responsibilities and I am capable of working both in teams and individually to tight deadlines. As an enthusiastic individual, I am eager for the opportunity of developing my skills at the [company name]. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Draft
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Hello Draft - I've made some suggestions in your text.

Dear Sir/Madam,
As a an Honours graduate with honors in [degree], I am writing to apply for the Research Assistant position at [company name]. [company name] is Australia's leading provider of X, Y and Z service. (you don't need to tell them what they do - they should know this already) With my experience in research and my discipline (what discipline? - be specific) knowledge, I am confident that I will make a positive contribution to the [company name]. In For my honours degree, I conducted an independent research and wrote a thesis (give the title of your thesis - it is more specific) based on my findings. This involved literature review, collecting and analysing data, explaining (did you design the eperiment also?) research methodology and reporting statistical results. I have five years' experience of using Excel for building economic and financial economics/finance models, forecasting(forecasting what?) and conducting data analysis (statistics?). I also worked for the School of X as a tutor. The teaching and researching experience prepared me with a great deal of people skills, information (? communication) skills and technical skills. I also demonstrated the ability (how? give a specific example) to present information and ideas effectively in different formats through these experiences. I am accustomed to taking on responsibilities and I am capable of working both in teams and individually to tight deadlines. As an enthusiastic individual, I am eager for the opportunity of developing my skills at the [company name]. Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to hearing from you.Yours sincerely,Draft
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