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I need a help!!!!!!!!

I´m brazilian and this my firts letter written, I need a help to correct!



Dear "name professor",



I am writing to apply for the PhD. student position in your research group in the Department of Chemistry at University of British Columbia.


I am Bachelor in Chemistry by Universidade Luterana do Brasil- Brazil, with Honors [GPA: 3.46], and Master degree [GPA: 3.75] by Federal University of Rio Grande do Sul – UFRGS - as a member of Laboratório xxxx xxxxs (LABeeN) research group. Where could work with new luminescent materials. There I gained profound knowledge in hybrid organic inorganic materials development, but also real working experience in an multidisciplinary environment.


My research interests lie at the new materials with optics properties – particularly applications in bionalysis. My research contributions have been to design materials doped with organic fluorescent molecules producing vitreous material under high pressure and low temperature, and sub-micro spherical sol-gel material with important properties like dual light emission in two different and well defined areas of spectra.


As well as my good understanding of academic principles, I am a very motivated, hardworking and effective individual. Throughout my career, I obtained a good communication and organizational skills. It makes me confident that I will be suitable for your research team.


For my future career, I see this PhD program as the way to broaden my knowledge in designing and implementing new luminescent devices, as well as use them in new technologies for the delivery of health care. Your program proposes covers areas of research that match my interests, such as new tools for biomedical research applied.


I have enclosed my CV, and representative published papers. I have asked the following people to write letters of recommendation on my behalf:


XXXX XXXXni (advisor) Email Removed">Email Removed

LXXXXXXXXXx xx Email Removed">Email Removed

EXXXX XXXX Email Removed">Email Removed



Thank you in advance for your consideration of my application.


Sincerely,


joseh lalaland

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Do someone can help me??

As english is not my native language, I´m afraid of mistakes...



Dear professor Popeye,



I am writing to apply for the PhD. student position in your research group in the Department of Chemistry at University of British Columbia.


I am Bachelor in Chemistry by Universidade Luterana do Brasil- Brazil, with Honors [GPA: 3.46], and Master degree [GPA: 3.75] by Federal University of Rio Grande do Sul – UFRGS - as a member of Laboratório of blue eggs (LBEggs) research group. Where could work with new luminescent materials. There I gained profound knowledge in hybrid organic inorganic materials development, but also real working experience in an multidisciplinary environment.


My research interests lie at the new materials with optics properties – particularly applications in bionalysis. My research contributions have been to design materials doped with organic fluorescent molecules producing vitreous material under high pressure and low temperature, and sub-micro spherical sol-gel material with important properties like dual light emission in two different and well defined areas of spectra.


As well as my good understanding of academic principles, I am a very motivated, hardworking and effective individual. Throughout my career, I obtained a good communication and organizational skills. It makes me confident that I will be suitable for your research team.

For my future career, I see this PhD program as the way to broaden my knowledge in designing and implementing new luminescent devices, as well as use them in new technologies for the delivery of health care. Your program proposes covers areas of research that match my interests, such as new tools for biomedical research applied.


I have enclosed my CV, and representative published papers. I have asked the following people to write letters of recommendation on my behalf:



reference 1 xxx

reference 2 xxx

reference 3 xxx


Thank you in advance for your consideration of my application.


Sincerely,


Mickey Mouse

I need a help!

I'm Brazilian, and this is my first letter in English. I need your help to correct it.

Dear Professor Kent,

I am writing to apply for the PhD student position in your research group at the Department of Chemistry in the University of British Columbia.

I have a bachelor's in Chemistry from Universidade Luterana do Brasil, with honors [GPA: 3.46], and a master's degree [GPA: 3.75] from Federal University of Rio Grande do Sul – UFRGS Laboratório xxxx xxxxs (LABeeN), where I worked with new luminescent materials. There, I gained profound knowledge in hybrid organic-inorganic materials development, as well as practical working experience in a multidisciplinary environment.

My research interest is focused on new materials with optics properties, and particularly their applications in bio-analysis. My research contributions have been to design materials doped with organic fluorescent molecules, producing vitreous material under high pressure and low temperature, and sub-micro spherical sol-gel material with important properties like dual light emission in two different and well-defined areas of spectra.

As well as my strong understanding of academic research principles, I am a very motivated, hard-working and effective individual. Throughout my career, I have always endeavoured to improve my communication and organizational skills. It makes me confident that I will be suitable for your research team.

For my future career, I see this PhD program as the way to broaden my knowledge in designing and implementing new luminescent devices, as well as using them in new technologies for the delivery of novel healthcare solutions. Your program covers areas of research that match my interests, such as new tools for applied biomedical research.

I have enclosed my CV, and representative published papers. I have asked the following people to write letters of recommendation on my behalf:

XXXX XXXXni (advisor) Email Removed">Email Removed

LXXXXXXXXXx xx Email Removed">Email Removed

EXXXX XXXX Email Removed">Email Removed

Thank you in advance for considering my application.

Yours sincerely,

Joseh Lalaland