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Could you please help me to describe these two figures? Particularly, the part in bold.


Fig 11


Fig 12
"As shown in Figures 11 and 12, changing the hot zone’s temperature by±10˚C causes a considerable change in the deposition rate. This occurs because of the reaction activation energy, which is a function of reaction chamber temperature. In addition, Figures 11 and 12 shows that the uniformity of the deposition rate by increasing temperature of wafers is getting worse, but it can be seen that they are still approximately in the same line."
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It is not about scientific things! It is about simple English. So don't avoid this, just please check grammar and help me to use proper words.
Hi,

You can't say uniformity gets worse.
You can't say uniformity by increasing . . . .

How about this?
In addition, Figures 11 and 12 show that, when the temperature of the wafers increases, the uniformity of the deposition rate decreases. However, it can be seen that they are still approximately in the same line."

Clive
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youzouIt is not about scientific things! It is about simple English. So don't avoid this, just please check grammar and help me to use proper words.
I can see that you have not yet learned courtesy. Clive has been very kind indeed to bother to respond to your demand.
Mister MicawberI can see that you have not yet learned courtesy.
Thanks for the reply, and I am sorry. I was just trying to make a friendly comment, like in parenthesis. I am learning English, so I would appreciate it if you could correct me.

How about this:

instead of "So don't avoid this, just please check grammar and help me to use proper words."

"Dear friends, I am not looking for a scientific correction, but a correction about grammar and proper usage of words in this essay."

However, I didn't meant to speak out of courtesy and I apologize for that, and I am grateful that you have reminded that to me.
Hi,

Indeed, some words can be tricky.
it can often sound negative to suggest that someone may perhaps be avoidiing something.

Clive.
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Thank you very much Clive for answering. As Mister Micawber said I wasn't polite so thanks again for ignoring that.
Clivethe uniformity of the deposition rate decreases. However, it can be seen that they are still approximately in the same line.
Do you think if I used e.g. "the uniformity of the deposition rate decreases, but it can be seen that the magnitude of the variation is approximately a constant value"
Cliveit can often sound negative to suggest that someone may perhaps be avoidiing something.
Thank you, but could you please explain how avoid can bear a negative meaning?
youzouIt is not about scientific things! It is about simple English. So don't avoid this, just please check grammar and help me to use proper words.
Clive has hit upon one point. There are also these:

It is not about scientific things! -- Are we not to be trusted to understand science?
It is about simple English. - Is it only simple English that we can check, then?
So don't avoid this -- Do you suggest that we were avoiding your post?

I do not blame you at all, youzou, for not using perfect English, but your impatience for a response seems to show through.
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