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If you have a piece of text in which a person performs an action (i.e. sat on the rock and stared out to sea) and then has a thought (Would John love this view in the same way as she did), would you put that thought in any kind of quotation marks? If the thought included a question, would you use a question mark? Any help gratefully received.

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e.g. Anna sat on the rock and stared out to sea. Would John love this view in the same way as she did. It was too bad that she only had dull Kevin with whom to share the experience. Would he never stop talking and just allow her to enjoy it instead of having to endure a running commentary on everything in front of them.
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I think I'd leave out the quotation marks and add question marks too:


Anna sat on the rock and stared out to sea. Would John love this view in the same way that she did? It was too bad that she only had dull Kevin with whom to share the experience. Would he never stop talking? Why didn't he just allow her to enjoy it, instead of making her endure a running commentary on everything in front of them?
Poor Kevin.

MrP

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A common literary device in modern novels is to use italics for internal thoughts.
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You can't justify quotations in that sentence about a thought, but a question mark at the end of the sentence is fine.

Consider placing the word "only" AFTER the verb "had": It was too bad that she had only dull Keven . . .

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Hi,

Perhaps writers could adapt to the written word the method that Blue Bottle used to use on the Goon Show on British radio years ago. He used to speak to someone, and then speak his thoughts out loud by first signalling that they were thoughts by saying the word 'thinks'.

eg Yes, mine capitan, I will hide this lighted stick of dynamite in my trouser pocket. Thinks: You dirty rotten swine, you are trying to dead me!

Best wishes, Clive
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I dont want the first line in my story to read- Max thought to himself......

This is the first paragraph in my story and I'm not sure how to let the reader know that these are the characters thoughts.

Chapter One


I died in the fire, when the zeppelin Hindenburg was destroyed. Thirty six others lost their lives in that disaster. But then the PreDEC rescuers pulled us all out of the fire and history never recorded it. All thirty five of the others went on to have normal lives. But not me. I was borught here. Eight hundred years into the future and twenty lightyears away from Earth. If dad could just see me now. I miss him. I feel so guilty for what I did. I didn't just run away. I really hung him out to dry. Now I'm here, alive, safe and not a care in the world except my conscience.
You could write "Thinks" as suggested by Clive.
AnonymousI dont want the first line in my story to read- Max thought to himself......

This is the first paragraph in my story and I'm not sure how to let the reader know that these are the characters thoughts.

Chapter One

I died in the fire, when the zeppelin Hindenburg was destroyed. Thirty six others lost their lives in that disaster. But then the PreDEC rescuers pulled us all out of the fire and history never recorded it. All thirty five of the others went on to have normal lives. But not me. I was borught here. Eight hundred years into the future and twenty lightyears away from Earth. If dad could just see me now. I miss him. I feel so guilty for what I did. I didn't just run away. I really hung him out to dry. Now I'm here, alive, safe and not a care in the world except my conscience.
You have no need to "indicate" that these are the thoughts of the character. The character is narrating his story - it is clear that they are his thoughts.

Another way is to change the font for the thoughts.

Where you will need some way to indicate thought rather than narration or speech is where you [maybe] have dialogue, but then have a character thinking something. These can by highlighted by italicisation, which makes the sentence stand out.
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What if it was something like: Why am I here, he thought

Would it be: "Why am I here?", he thought

OR

Why am I here?, he thought
Pls be aware that some modern writers (say Joyce, Faulkner or Gaddis, some of them in what is called stream of consciousness) won'ttell you by markers that the character has just changed or that now the author's quoting their thoughts. You really need to read very carefullyEmotion: smile
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