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Please help me improve the following e-mail for an improvement work. Many thanks.

We refer to a joint site meeting with Mr. Denny at our Sunshine Playground last Friday. During the meeting, Mr. Denny quoted the local residents' concern about the frequent damages on different components of the elderly fitness equipment (EFE) and the serious shortage of such equipment within the playground, prompting a considerable inconvenience to the elder citizens. Mr. Denny therefore proposed the responsible party, supposed to be your department, to consider strengthening the daily repair works on the EFE and expanding the current EFE area with the addition of at least one EFE or replacing a children play equipment there with a new EFE. To address Mr. Denny's and the local residents' concerns, please conduct a study on the feasibility of their suggestions and directly update Mr. Denny about the result of your study afterwards. On the other hand, as discussed, since the contents of your two complaint referrals from different complainants are identical to each other, we want to know, for the time-saving, if we can make a single reply for the two referrals to your department in one go.
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We refer to the joint site meeting with Mr. Denny at our Sunshine Playground last Friday. During the meeting, Mr. Denny quoted highlighted the local residents' concern about the frequent damage on different to the various components of the elderly fitness equipment (EFE) and the serious shortage of such equipment within the playground, prompting which represents a considerable inconvenience to the local elderly residents. citizens. Mr. Denny, therefore, proposed the responsible party, supposed to be which is your department, to consider strengthening increasing the daily repair work on the EFE and expanding the current EFE area with the addition of at least one extra piece of EFE or replacing the children play equipment there with new EFE. To address Mr. Denny's and the local residents' concerns, please conduct a study on the feasibility of their suggestions and directly update Mr. Denny about the result of your study afterwards. On the other hand, Also as discussed, since the contents of your two complaint referrals from by different complainants are identical, to each other, we want to let me know , for the time-saving, if we you can make provide a single reply for the two referrals to your department. in one go.

Note that "equipment" is a mass noun.
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chowbarryMr. Denny
Mr, Mrs or Miss are not normally used with first names. You could use Mr with a surname or a full name.
chowbarryabout the frequent damages on different components
about the frequent damage to different components
chowbarryprompting a considerable inconvenience to the elder citizens.
causing considerable inconvenience to the elderly citizens.
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teechr, thank you for your correction.