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Hello,
I will apply to an internship position and what I've write:

Dear Ms. ***,
My name is ******* I graduated from ******** University with a B.S. degree in Information Technology this month and I would like to apply for an internship position with (company name).

This internship is beneficial to me at this stage of my development process because it fits my educational background, my continuing willingness to learn new things and represents a perfect chance to improve my skills. I am interested in this position since I am interested in technology and education both. In 2013 and 2014 I worked for an educational project which was incubated by ***** business Incubator and applied in ******* School.

My resume is attached to this email for your review.
Thank you very much for your time.

Sincerely,

P.S: The company is education company and the internship for Computer students

Please let me know if there is any mistake or a better way to write this email.
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Dear Ms. ***,
My name is ******* I graduated from ******** University with a B.S. degree in Information Technology this month and I would like to apply for an internship position with (company name).

This internship is beneficial to me at this stage of my development process because it fits my educational background and my continuing willingness to learn new things. It also and represents a perfect chance to (practice what I've learned and ?) improve my skills. I am interested in this position since I am interested in because it combines both technology and education both. In 2013 and 2014 I worked for an educational project which was incubated (sponsored, funded?) by ***** business Incubator and applied in ******* School.

My resume is attached to this email for your review.
Thank you very much for your time.
AnonymousMy resume is attached to this email for your review.
My resume (or cv) is attached to this email for you to review.
AnonymousP.S: The company is education company and the internship for Computer students You need a full stop here.
P.S: The company is an education company and the internship is for computer students.
AnonymousPlease let me know if there is any mistake or a better way to write this email.
Please let me know if there are any mistakes or better ways to write this email.
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Thank you so much AlpheccaStars ( :
AnonymousMy resume (or cv) is attached to this email for you to review.
Dear Anon;
You are welcome to comment on the grammar in the poster's question if you also provide an answer to the question. Otherwise, it is quite unhelpful.
AnonymousAnonymousMy resume is attached to this email for your review.My resume (or cv) is attached to this email for you to review.
Your first comment was incorrect, by the way. "for your review," as the original poster wrote, is fine.
AlpheccaStars"for your review," as the original poster wrote, is fine.
So is "for you to review,".
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AnonymousSo is "for you to review,".
Why correct something that is already OK, as if it weren't? That is confusing.
And why don't you register as a named user, if you are interested in contributing?