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TASk 1

The picture demonstrates two types of student room for two people and one person at an Australian university.

Overall, the student room for two people is more expensive and bigger with much more facilities than the room for one person.

Firstly, the room for a single person is 2.5 metres in length, which is shorter by 1.5 metres compared to the double-student room. Moreover, the flat for two roommates have study desks, beds as twice as the single-student room. The big table stands in the only double-student room. By the way, the price for the bigger room is 350 dollars per week, while the smaller one requires 200 dollars per week.

At the same time, both of the rooms are equipped with television. In both rooms, all kitchen machines as stove, sink, microwave are presented. Finally, the bathroom is located in the left-upper angle of the room in both of them.


TASK 2


Some university courses are currently proposed to learn on the internet thus studying without leaving home. There are some benefits such as saving money and time on commuting and making own schedule of lessons, whereas it could harm the effectiveness of learning and promote laziness in students.

First of all, sitting at home on the computer helps to retain all the precious money and time. Commuting is costly, especially in everyday riding on the bus. It takes away a decent part of your savings and decreases your opportunity to buy something more important. By this way, you could preserve your cash to buy some new online courses or books, rather than buy bus-tickets. In addition, time which is expended on riding in the bus could be directed into a bunch of useful things as sport or learning. Hence, online learning gives lots of opportunities to develop own personality and pile up some cash.

However, some negative effects as lowering the pace of education and losing of disciple influence people to a high degree. If the person does not communicate with teachers in reality, it would lead to worse saturating of new information and less understanding in a student. Also, students get relaxed if nobody controls their deeds during the studying days, and this could deteriorate the learning process as well. Finally, students could end their academic year with weak results.

In conclusion, online courses of universities have advantages and drawbacks, if they are applied to learning process, all factors should be included like student`s determination, type of subject, lack of contact and other so that it would not hurt the learning process and knowledge of students.

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Some university courses are currently proposed to learn (Incorrect synopsis. "Proposed" means that they are not available.. Also your use of the infinitive form is wrong. Courses do not learn anything. ) on the internet thus studying without leaving home. (ungrammatical. Courses do not study.) There are some benefits such as saving money and time on commuting and making one's own schedule of lessons, whereas it (wrong pronoun. The antecedent is "courses" which is plural.) could harm the effectiveness of learning and promote laziness in students.


This is not an advantages/disadvantages essay type. You did not answer the essay prompt. " Is this a positive or negative development?" You must include a statement like this:

This is mostly a positive development, although there are pitfalls that some of the students must be aware of and avoid. 

First of all, sitting at home on (We sit on a chair or a couch or a stool. A computer would not be a comfortable place to sit!) at the computer helps to save retain all the precious money and time. (This is not logical. When you sit at the computer are you playing online games, or posting to someone's Facebook wall or what? ) Commuting is costly, especially in everyday riding on the bus every day. It takes away a decent part of your savings and decreases your opportunity to buy something more important. By (wrong word) This way, you could preserve your cash to buy some new online courses or books, rather than buy bus-tickets. (no hyphen) In addition, time which is expended on riding in the bus could be directed into a bunch of useful things as sport or learning. Hence, online learning gives lots of opportunities to develop your own personality and pile up some cash. (This paragraph is not good. You must have an opening sentence relating to taking a course at home on your computer. Then you must logically continue your argument. )

However, some negative effects as lowering the pace of education and losing of disciple (wrong word. A disciple is a follower of a religious leader. ) influence (wrong word) people to a high degree. If the person does not communicate with teachers in reality, (wrong expression) it would lead to worse saturating (wrong word) of new information and less understanding in a student. Also, students get relaxed if nobody controls their deeds (wrong word) during the studying days, (wrong expression) and this could deteriorate (wrong word) the learning process as well. Finally, students could end their academic year with weak results.

In conclusion, online courses of universities have advantages and drawbacks, (comma splice error, ungrammatical sentence) if they are applied to learning process, all factors should be included like the student`s (wrong mark) determination, type of subject, lack of contact and other so that it would not hurt the learning process and knowledge of students. (You did not answer the essay prompt. You did not include examples from your own experience. Also, there were many vocabulary usage problems. )

Comments  

Dear Witty File;

Please do not put two essays in one post.
Please include the instructions.

The instructions for Task 1 are missing, so I will only comment on Task 2.

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