Art and music classes should not be mandatory at school Nowadays, many people commonly believed that art and music are subsidiary subject so they think it shouldn’t be mandatory at school but others do not agree. To begin with, art and music which help us foster creativity. Of course, in art lesson, when students are received a topic by teacher to draw. It’s certain that teacher will have a lot of amazing and unique ideas from their students. For example: to motivated personal creativity people organize many competitions about both art and music such as the voice kid, art festival ,.. and so on. Another good thing about it is that, it not only bring creation but also make opportunity for students to relieve stress after hard working. Entertainment is a necessary activity in life. One of the popular and useful ways for entertained is listening, singing a song or drawing a picture. For my experience people often wear an earphone while walking to relax their mind. In short, art and music subjects should be compulsory at school because reduce the stress for students after lessons and impulse their creativityis it ok?

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Art and music classes should not be mandatory at school Nowadays, many people commonly believed that art and music are subsidiary subject so they think it shouldn’t be mandatory at school but others do not agree. To begin with, art and music which help us foster creativity. Of course, in art lesson, when students are received a topic by teacher to draw. It’s certain that teacher will have a lot of amazing and unique ideas from their students. For example: to motivated personal creativity people organize many competitions about both art and music such as the voice kid, art festival ,.. and so on. Another good thing about it is that, it not only bring creation but also make opportunity for students to relieve stress after hard working. Entertainment is a necessary activity in life. One of the popular and useful ways for entertained is listening, singing a song or drawing a picture. For my experience people often wear an earphone while walking to relax their mind. In short, art and music subjects should be compulsory at school because reduce the stress for students after lessons and impulse their creativityis it ok?

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