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Write about the following topic.

In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education.

What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

You should write at least 250 words.

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The knowledge about world of work is very much and not easy like you think. So that some children from the age of 11 or 13 are learnt about practical skills to get a job that's too soon. They are too young to learn it because it's vey difficult to remember and apply to life. Maybe they will not understand clearly about the nature of the problem.

From that, I think the best way is still let them provide a more general academic education to help them help enough knowledge. When they are 15, they should be learn practical skills, but now is too soon. At this age, school should improve them a lot of knowledge about the subjects, after that is about the life. Create many outdoors activities to help them has an active habitat, from that, when they go out, they can easy to adapt.

Nowadays, i can see a lot of bad case of the children, who have properly raised, not enough knowledge of life. Example children steal money from their parents or cheat people in the community to catch the money. That's so terrible.

In my opinion the general academic education is still more important than the skill. If you don't have the knowledge, you can not understand to work and you will have a lot of difficult during the pocess of finding work. In short i think this thing should be applied in all countries of the world because it will help them to grow from geniuses with both knowledge and skills.

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