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Question: It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is some time claimed that any child can be taught to become a sport person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

The controversy between natural talents and training has been disscussed for a while. Some people believed that only individuals with natural talents can become an expert in areas such as footbal players or musicians. In the other side, any child can reach a great levels via training or practicing.

Each side has their own opinions. First, the talents have their own great skills probably inherited from their gene's families. Those people often become well-known because of their virtuoso skills. This makes people think that they could easily reach success with their talents. The fact that many celebrities shared their achivements since they were in a young age. That is why people think that the natural talents could reach such a high level in their element that few people can achive.

Second, in the other hand, people deny the opinion above and argue that any child can be good at any field if they are trained frequently, and the education systems was formed because of that belief. Nowadays, a substantial number of people believe in that thought and they poured a lot of money for their childen's education with the desire that they can be talented. Personally, I do believe that if they had talents or not, they could not reach a comparable level without practicing, and without talents, the continuous of training could be a tough progress and may be, hopeless. So, the combine between natural talents and training is neccessary. Those talents people, they also have to put in a lot of effort, and they know what their strengths are.

In conclusion, , I agree that any child can be taught to become a gifted people, but some natural talents are required.

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