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Hello everyone! My name's Tien. I'm 15 years old. I study in class 10A5 at Nguyen Khuyen High school. I live in Phu Thuan village. I was fortunate to be born into a small and extremely happy family of 3 members: my father, my mother, and I. My mother is a housewife. My father is a security guard. In my free time, I often spend a lot of time listening to music. Because it is an excellent way to relax after a long working day. In the future, I would like to become a doctor. However, becoming a doctor it's not an easy journey. Doctors must have a strong character, brave, and be balanced to react quickly in emergency situations and to cope with stress. I will study well and try my best to make my dream come true.
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Hello everyone! My name's Tien. I'm 15 years old. I study in class 10A5 at Nguyen Khuyen High school. I live in Phu Thuan village. I was fortunate to be born into a small and extremely happy family of 3 members: my father, my mother, and me. My mother is a housewife. My father is a security guard. In my free time, I often spend a lot of time listening to music . B because it is an excellent way to relax after a long working day studying at school. In the future, I would like to become a doctor. However, becoming a doctor it's is not an easy journey. Doctors must have a strong character and be brave and cool-headed be balanced to react quickly in emergency situations and to cope with stress. I will study diligently well and try my best to make my dream come true.