Hi All,

English is not my first language and I am still learning it. Here is my first poetry, I wrote with the little english I know. Please ignore grammatical errors and please do comment

Thanks,
Pradeep

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Angels were artists
Trees were brushes
Flowers were colors
Sky was canvas
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Crafted nobly by the nature

Her Body
Like?
An Idol of Aphrodite
Made by the almighty
My Girl?.
A perfect woman

Her Skin
Like?
Velvety fabrics
With a moonbeam touch
My Girl?.
A perfect woman

Her hairs
Like?
Dark black clouds
Floating in the sky
My Girl?.
A perfect woman

Her lips
Like?
Red rose petals
Jelling together
My Girl?.
A perfect woman

Her Clothes
Like?
A creeper takes hold
On a stem
My Girl?.
A perfect woman

Her laughter
Like?
Hundreds of songbirds
Singing together
My Girl?.
A perfect woman

Her Walk
Like?
A female serpent moving slowly
In the sand
My Girl?.
A perfect woman

Angels were artists
Trees were brushes
Flowers were colors
Sky was canvas
My Girl?.
A perfect woman
Crafted nobly by the nature

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english is not my native language too. and i understand your poem little. in my opinion , it is very good.
i think i should study from you.
As a first poem in English ,it is very good. Keep writing more.
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Poetry is the easiest of the literary skills to write - and by far the most difficult to master.

If you have a desire to improve your English, reading and analysing poetry is the way to go. You'll be amazed how quickly your English improves.

As to your poem. In my opinion a lot more work is needed here. The Imagination and imagery is fine but in such abundance as to wear the reader down. Reduce the versus.

HePo

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