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Hi people!

I'd like to know if the following sentence is correct:

"About quality control problems, we decided to make a list including the most important providers and try to obtain discounts for large quantities of material."

Is this sentence correct? Or should it read:

"About quality control problems, we decided to make a list including the most important providers and to try to obtain discounts for large quantities of material."

Are there any rules governing enumerations when headed by a verb?I tend to read the sentence as: we decided X and X (i.e., to do X and to do X), and NOT we decided to X and X.

Thanks a lot!

Mara.

PS: Can you spot any other mistakes in the sentence?
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Hello Mara

As I am a mere learner, I think I am not qualified to correct your writing. But if you don’t mind, let me say my opinion.

(1) Your writing seems nice to me. But I think the expression "about the quality control problems" is too informal for your context. If I were you, I would choose a more formal version such as "in respect to the quality control problem".
(2) I feel "to obtain discounts for large quantities of material" doesn't fit your context. I think it would be better to change it to something like "to reduce costs for most of raw materials", though it's my humble opinion.
(3) "V to do X and to do Y" is OK when "do X" is a long phrase. But it is more common to say "V to do X and do Y" when "do X" is not so long.

paco
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Here again, I would agree with you. If the repeating clause follows the same pattern (eg that of an infinitive verb) then it has also to start with 'to' : '...decided to make..... and to try....'.

Also, I think 'about' isn't usually used to open the sentence. I'd rather say : 'Regarding quality control problems' or 'As far as quality control problems'. But I actually don't know if there is really such a rule about not using 'About' in the beginning of a sentence...
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In light of Paco's reply... I stand corrected :
- "I would like to take a break and [] have a cigarette..." : no need for repeating 'to' since the sentence is short enough.
- "We decided to make a list of all the possible suppliers and to try to get a discount on their products : the sentence is probably long enough to justify repeating the 'to' ?
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WaïtiIn light of Paco's reply... I stand corrected :
- "I would like to take a break and [] have a cigarette..." : no need for repeating 'to' since the sentence is short enough.
- "We decided to make a list of all the possible suppliers and to try to get a discount on their products : the sentence is probably long enough to justify repeating the 'to' ?
I think you are right. I remember I argued about this issue with my teacher in an ESL school at Berkeley. Most of Americans prefer to omit the second "to".

paco