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In contemporary society, a heated controversy has arisen over whether environmental problems should be solved by personal and country alone or international scale. From my perspective, I firmly believe that the environmental degradation needs to be solved with adopting international level implement is far more efficient.


Global warming is the main environmental issue due to the emissions of greenhouse gases, then the sea level rising from day to day because of melting icebergs. This scene we always see on television news indicates that the tragedy would occur further frequently if we still choosing to neglect environmental problems. Besides, climate change is the reason to cause natural disasters such as droughts, floods and violent storms to take place in many countries.


Cooperate internationally has plenty of benefits. Firstly, different countries could exchange various kinds of experiences on how to prevent and eliminate the damages from disasters. For instance, Beijing government had built a shelter-belt on the north of China for the purpose of resolving the sandstorm and dusk storm; therefore, if there are other countries encounter the same problem, the authority could ask for Beijing professional opinions to build shelter-belt. Moreover, global cooperation to enact the common law and regulation like the Kyoto Protocol could limit the emission of carbon dioxide successfully, this system reinforcing checks and balances between countries. Last but not least, solved by international scale can raise public awareness. After all, I think that the top-down approach is more efficient.


By way of conclusion, even though each of us needs to take responsibility of environmental problems not just only government duty to do, the method of adopting global cooperation could solve the serious environmental degradation effectively and efficiently than person or country alone.

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Topic: Environmental problems are so big that they cannot be solved by any person or country alone. Instead, it should be solved at international level. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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In contemporary society, a heated controversy (The topic does not mention a heated controversy. Just paraphrase the topic rather than adding something that is not there.. Exaggeration is not a good approach.) has arisen over whether environmental problems should be solved by personal (wrong word) and country alone or international scale. (wrong word) From my perspective, I firmly believe that the environmental degradation needs to be solved by with adopting international level implement is far more efficient. (ungrammatical sentence structure)

Global warming is the main environmental issue due to the emissions of greenhouse gases, (end of sentence here) then the sea level is rising from day to day because of melting icebergs. (incorrect. The melting of icebergs does not cause the sea level to rise. To prove this, put some water in a glass. Add a few ice cubes and mark the level. When the ice melts, the level of water in the glass will be the same. The rising sea level is because glaciers on land - Greenland and Antarctica - are melting and the meltwater is running into the ocean.. ) This scene we always see on television news indicates that the tragedy would occur further frequently if we still choosing (wrong verb form) to neglect environmental problems. Besides, climate change is the reason to cause of natural disasters such as droughts, floods and violent storms to take place (wrong verb form) in many countries.


Cooperate (wrong word - cooperate is a verb) internationally has plenty of benefits. Firstly, First, different countries could exchange various kinds of experiences on how to prevent and eliminate the damage damages from disasters. For instance, the Beijing government had built a shelter-belt on the north of China for the purpose of resolving (wrong word) the sandstorm and dusk (wrong word) storm; therefore, if there are other countries encounter (ungrammatical clause structure ) the same problem, the authority could ask for Beijing professional opinions to build a shelter-belt. Moreover, global cooperation to enact the common law and regulation like the Kyoto Protocol could limit the emission of carbon dioxide successfully, this system of reinforcing checks and balances between countries. Last but not least, solved (wrong verb form ) by international scale can raise public awareness. After all, I think that the top-down approach is more efficient.


By way of conclusion, even though each of us needs to take responsibility for addressing of environmental problems not just only government duty to do, (ungrammatical . Also comma splice error) the method of adopting global cooperation could solve the serious environmental degradation more effectively and efficiently than one person or country alone.