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Sports have a history of 3000 years, they started with wars and training as a hunter, and that's why a lot of games involve the throwing of rocks and stakes. The big questions are why sports are important to us? and what are their benefits?

First, sports are important due to their worthwhile benefits. For instance, sports and education have a strong bond which helps individuals to be disciplined and to get closer. Moreover, sports make our lives better, successful, and that's why we gave them such importance throughout history.

Second, Sports are not racist nor care if we are black, white or even purple, and when people practice sports they do not do it because they are Asian, Arab, etc. They do it because they are all the same.

Third, the benefits of sports are numerous such as :

1- sports in mental and physical health: It is known over the years that doctors prescribe to their patients daily exercises or sports in general because they fight anxiety and depression by releasing feel-good endorphins, so when most of us finish exercising we feel energetic and happy.

They also improve our physical condition by getting in shape.

2-Self esteem boost: The Women's Sports Foundation reported in 2004 that sports help teen girls to perform well in school, develop a positive self-image and reduce their risk of developing an eating disorder (source: sports rec)

Sports have many more benefits other than those we have mentioned, furthermore, not everyone is aware of the importance and we must at least practice one sport activity to keep our mental and physical sane.

I just have two quick comments for you

You should put at the front of your essay the exact title or question that you have been asked to write about.

Numbering your sections is not appropriate in an essay, so don't do it. It's OK to do that in a report, but an essay is not a report.


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tsundereHello, would anyone please help me correct any mistakes in this essay?

Which test are you practising for?