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could anybody correct this essay for me? Great thanks in advance.
Topics:Do internet only bring our teenagers bad influences?

Nowaday, many teens are playing computer games in computer center almost all the time. They don't corcern about their studies and pay full-attention in games. Beside playing games, they are also addicted in blue items and another entertainments in the internet. The addiction consume all of their precious youth.
In fact, if our teenagers don't abuse internets, it can bring our teenagers masive benifits. Internet can actually enhance students studies. As there are many supplementery information relative to their homework in the internet. Forums in the internet can also help our teens solve many difficult problems. Although, our teens can turn to their teacher when they find any problems in their studies, they can find more opinions from more people in the online forums.
With internet they can know more about the world as easy as pie so that they will get mature ealier and become more clever. As it can help to open their mind. That why teens in city are more acute and open-mined.
Our teenagers can get free books and videos including new albums from internet. It can help to relieve their parents burdens. But for those who have no a good control to themselves may addict into entertainment in internets and idle away their time.
In a nutshell, user's attitude decide internet is benificial or harmful.
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Hi,

Here are some edits.

In an essay, avoid contractions, like 'don't'. Say 'do not'.

Please ask if you don't understand the reason for any of these changes.

Best wishes, Clive

Topics: Does the internet only have a bad influence on our teenagers?

Nowaday, many teens are playing computer games in computer centers almost all the time. They don't think about their studies, but instead pay full attention to the games. Besides playing games, they are also addicted to blue items and another entertainment on the internet. This addiction consumes all of their precious youth.

In fact, if our teenagers don't abuse the internet, it can bring them massive benifits. The internet can actually enhance students' studies, as there is a lot of supplementary information relative to their homework in the internet. Forums on the internet can also help our teens solve many difficult problems. Although our teens can turn to their teacher when they find any problems in their studies, they can find more opinions from more people in the online forums.

With the internet they can know learn more about the world as easy as pie, so that they will get mature earlier and become more clever as it can help to open their mind. That is why teens in the city are more acute and open-minded.

Our teenagers can get free books and videos, including new albums, from the internet. It can help to relieve their parents' burdens. But for those who do not have good control of themselves may become addicted to entertainment on the internet and idle away their time.

In a nutshell, the user's attitude decides whether the internet is beneficial or harmful.
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Topics (You have plural here, but only one topic -what are the other topics?): Do the Internet only bring our teenagers bad influences? (The Internet cannot bring influences. That does not make sense. Something can have a bad influence on... )
Please always write "the Internet". You find information and music on the Internet.

Pay attention to subject / verb agreement and plurals. Check your spelling.

I have highlighted the words with problems, and made a few corrections.
Please fix the problems, or ask questions if you don't understand.

Nowadays, many teens are playing computer games in computer center almost all the time. They don't corcern about their studies and pay full-attention in games. Beside playing games, they are also addicted in blue items and another entertainments in the internet. The addiction consume all of their precious youth.
In fact, if our teenagers don't abuse internets, it can bring our teenagers masive benifits. Internet can actually enhance students studies. As there are many supplementery information relative to their homework in the internet. Forums in the internet can also help our teens solve many difficult problems. Although, our teens can turn to their teacher when they find any have problems in their studies, they can find more opinions from more people in the online forums.
With internet they can know more about the world as easy as pie so that they will get mature ealier and become more clever. As it can help to open their mind. (Not a complete sentence) That is why teens in city are more acute and open-mined.
Our teenagers can get free books and videos including new albums from internet. It can help to relieve their parents burdens. But for those who have no a good control to themselves may addict into entertainment in internets and idle away their time.
In a nutshell, user's attitude decide internet is benificial or harmful.
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Please help me? Maybe, you are too busy to help.
you can just pick out a few sentences which are most problematic and explain to me .
Nowaday, many teens are playing computer games in computer center almost all the time.
I use present continuous tense in this sentence because I think we can use this tense to express habitual actions. when we are angry at this fact.
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Vctory OngNowaday, many teens are playing computer games in computer center almost all the time.
I use present continuous tense in this sentence because I think we can use this tense to express habitual actions.

Yes, the present continuous tense is OK.
The present tense if also OK.
But you have to say "in the computer center" or "in computer centers"
Nowadays is a valid word, but it is very informal. You don't need to add this word; the sentence is fine without it.

Another way to say this is:
Many teens spend almost all their time playing games in the computer center.