There are various reasons why some people think that it would be wrong if parents give their children to school when they so young. Firstly, at a very early age children do not have essential skills such as language or communication ability are not good enough to gain knowledge. This may lead to that children find it difficult to understand what their teachers say. Secondly, the body of a child under 7 years old is not full developed, particular is his or her bones, if he or she sat to study in a wrong ways without careful of teachers, it would be easy for that child to suffer from bone problems as adult. Therefore, parents need to pay attention to choose a suitable age to start schooling for their children.

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There are various reasons why some people think that it would be wrong if parents give take / send their children to school when they so young. Firstly, First, at a very early age children do not have essential skills such as language or communication ability are not good enough to gain knowledge. (This is ungrammatical. There is no subject for the verb "are". see analysis below.) This may lead to (Missing object) that children find it difficult to understand what their teachers say. Secondly, Second, the body of a child under 7 years old is not full developed, particular is (This is ungrammatical. There is no subject for the verb "is". Particular is an adjective. ) his or her bones, if he or she sat to study in a wrong ways (wrong form) without careful (wrong word. Careful is an adjective.) of teachers, it would be easy for that child to suffer from bone problems as an adult. Therefore, parents need to pay attention to choose a suitable age to start schooling for their children.


At a very early age children do not have essential skills such as language or communication ability. (This is a complete sentence. )

??? are not good enough to gain knowledge. (What is the subject of "are"?)

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At a very early age children do not have essential skills such as the ability to communicate. Their skills are not good enough to participate in a classroom discussion and gain knowledge. 

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There are various reasons why some people think that it would be wrong if parents send their children to school when they are so young. First, at a very early age children are not good enough of their essential skills such as the ability of communication to participate in a classroom discussion and gain knowledge. This may lead to a situation where children find it difficult to understand what their teachers and fellows say. Second, the body of an under 7 year-old child is not fully developed, particularly in his or her bones. Ii would be easy for that child to suffer from bone problems as an adult if he or she sat to study in a wrong way without the carefulness/attention of teachers. Therefore, parents need to choose a suitable age for their children carefully to start schooling.

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There are various reasons why some people think that it would be wrong if parents send their children to school when they are so very young. First, at a very early age, children's are not good enough of their essential skills, such as the ability of communication to participate in a classroom discussion, are not good enough. and gain knowledge. This may lead to a situation where children find it difficult to understand what their teachers and classmates are saying. fellows say. Second, the body of an under-7-year-old child is not fully developed, particularly in his or her their bones. It would be easy for that child to suffer from bone problems as an adult if he or she they sat to study in a wrong way without the careful attention of teachers. Therefore, parents need to choose a suitable age for their children carefully to before they send them to school. start schooling.

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I believe that children should start their studying process as soon as possible for some reasons. There are many researches’ results have demonstrated that children can be able to imitate adult behaviors or talks and they can recognise many simple things such as colors or shapes at a very early age, even as toddlers. In addition, these days young parents usually have to go to work full time to earn a living, they would not have time to take care of their children. Therefore, by sending children to schools, they can totally focus on their jobs. Besides, it has a great number of children education institutions which has high quality of classes and well-educated teachers who are trained carefully how to deal with babies. This kind of centres would help children to become more independent than those who choose to study later.

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I believe that children should start school their studying process as soon as possible for some reasons. (Unnatural. Everything has reasons. If you know the number, it is ok - e.g. for three reasons. Otherwise, do not write this.)

There are many researches(research is non-count. It is most unusual to use the plural.) research results (This point is the end of main clause. What is the subject of "have demonstrated? You have not mastered dependent clauses yet. ) have demonstrated that children can be are able to imitate adult behaviors or talks and they can recognise many simple things such as colors or shapes at a very early age, even as toddlers.

Many research results have demonstrated that children are able to behave and talk like adults and they can identify and name colors and shapes as young as two or three years old.
There are many research results that have demonstrated that children are able to behave and talk like adults and they can identify and name colors and shapes as young as two or three years old.


In addition, these days young parents usually have to go to work full time to earn a living, (comma splice error - this is a common mistake that makes a sentence ungrammatical . https://chompchomp.com/terms/commasplice.htm ) they would do not have time to take care of their children.

Therefore, So by sending children to schools, they can totally focus on their jobs.

Besides, it (What does "it" refer to?) has a great number of children education institutions which has high quality of classes and well-educated teachers who are trained carefully how to deal with babies.

Besides, our city has a large number of pre-schools, nursery schools and daycare centers for children as young as six months old. They have age-appropriate activities and well-educated teachers who are experts at caring for them.

Daycare = a place that takes care of babies.
Nursery school = a place that takes children who are about at the age of toilet-training.
Pre-school = a place that takes children who can do basic activities by themselves such as eating and using a toilet.
Kindergarten = the earliest type of school with classes in letters, numbers and beginning reading, typically children 5-6 years old.

This kind (These kinds.) of centres would help children to become more independent than those who choose to study later.

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Some people think that children should begin their formal education at a very early age. Some think they should begin at least 7 years old. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People have different views about the certain age of starting schools for children. While some people believe that it should be more than 7 years old, I would argue that children now can get knowledge at a lower age.

There are various reasons why some people think that it would be wrong if parents send their children to school when they are very young. First, at a very early age, children’s essential skills, such as the ability to participate in a classroom discussion, are not good enough. This may lead to a situation where children find it difficult to understand what their teachers and classmates are saying. Second, the body of an under-7-year-old child is no fully developed, particularly their bones. It would be easy for children to suffer from bone problems as an adult if they sat to study in a wrong way without the careful attention of teachers. Therefore, parents need to choose a suitable age for their children carefully before sending them to school.

On the other hand, I believe that children should start school as soon as possible. There are many research results which have demonstrated that children are able to behave and talk like adults and they can identify and name colors and shapes as young as two or three years old. In addition, these days young parents usually have to go to work full time to earn a living, they do not have time to take care of their children. So by sending children to schools, they can totally focus on their jobs. Besides, our city has a large number of pre-schools, nursery schools and daycare centers for children as young as six months old. They have age-appropriate activities and well-educated teachers who are experts at caring for them. These kinds of centres would help children to become more independent than those who choose to study later.

In conclusion, although there are some nagative impacts on children to starting schools at under 7 years old, I believe that it is be able to bring more advantages.

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