Hello! Will you correct the following essay please? I'd really appreciate it if someone would give me their suggestions about how to make some sentences sound more natural. Thank you!

The curse of the Russian sky or why do planes fall?

It was a day of mourning on July 10 in Russia. The country mourned for the victims of the Airbus A310 crash in Irkutsk.

It is now impossible to say exactly what caused the catastrophe. However, what happened points to the obvious conlusion that it was 75-80% people's fault rather than an equipment failure. It was people who did not provide the necessary conditions for landing. This, however, does not mean that the tragedy in Irkutsk is due only to Russian disorder: such a catastrophe could have taken place in any country and involved any aircraft. This is proved by the statistics. Hundreds of planes crash during landing or take-off claiming the lives of hundreds of passengers in many counties in Asia, Africa, Europe, and America.

What is happening? Experts believe that today's aircraft are designed the way that a man's error is inevitable in an emergency situation. Obviously, no constructor can ackowledge the drawbacks and imperfection of his plane, although they are perfectly well aware of such.

There was a large government organization responsible for further development of planes in service. Actually, this organization operates even today but its influence on the final construction of a plane is much less than in the Soviet era. But even the experienced engineers of this organization could not forecast the crash of Tu-154, the model which had been in service for several decades. The construction of this type of plane provides a three-level hydrolic system. In the event of failure of one part, another serves as a substitute. No one thought that all the pipelines carrying a special liquid, connect, forming one pipeline in the rear. Fate is cruel. It just so happened that the ill-fated pipeline caught fire in the place where nobody expected it to and where it was not duplicated. The aftermath is quite predictable and grim: the plane crashed claiming the lives of virtually 100 passengers.

A modern aircraft presents a vast amount of information, with every piece of it not only communicating something to a pilot but also forcing him to solve complex logical tasks, connected with piloting a plane, engine system, and all board equipment. The following factors have led to the situation when a pilot experiences much more emotional strain, fatigue, and tiredness than 40-50 years ago: 1) lack of time which is an inevitable consequence of increasing speeds and altitudes 2) complexity of aviation equipment which consists of hundreds of units 3) environment changing with every second, and 4) significant psycological strain.

The safety of a flight depends on a pilot's experience, his ability to act not only in a determined way but also correctly in an emergency. An ideal pilot should be collected, balanced, sure-footed and possess moderation and quick and error-free reactions to failure of equipment both on the ground and in the air. Unfortunately, there are no ideal pilots.

With every new crash, they say that the plane was piloted by an experienced crew. Somehow, they forget that statistically most errors are made by first- and third-class pilots. So, is experience that important? Why was watching the plane speeding along the runaway all that the experienced crew of the ill-fated A-310 did? Even with the failure of the brake system, the crew could have removed the landing gear on discovering the failure. The plane and the crew might have suffered all the same but the plane would not at least have hit the concrete wall and broken up.

The answer to this question is simple and horrible in its simplicity: civil pilots are not taught how to act in a number of dangerous situations taking place on the ground and in the air. Even guidelines for piloting a plane do not have ways out of certain emergencies. For example, pilots are not taught what to do in case of losing spatial orientation as it was in the crash of the Armenian Airbus aircraft. Nor do such documents say anything about what to do on landing onto water, in case of failure of more than one system - for instance, the brake and reverse systems, as in the crash of the A-310.

A number of such cases could have been simulated on the ground. However, there are either no simulators at all like for practically all modern Russian aircraft like IL-96,
TU-334, TU-204 or not enough when it comes to foreign airliners. It would be incredulous if Russian pilots went to Tolouse to get the proper skills. There's no time for that, not to speak about the cost of it. Besides, a ground simulator is not a magic wand capable of disposing of all accidents taking place in the air. However perfect a pilot, he is conscious of being actually on the ground and that nothing is really happening to him.

Passenger planes are not exposed to various critical tests in the process of being constructed for two reasons. First, it is expensive. Tests need a lot of tons of kerosene. Besides, who is ready to guarantee the safety of pilots and who will pay for the wrecked liners? Second, western constructors comlicate matters by not sharing information on the drawbacks of their airliners with their Russian colleagues. What is more, overseas aircraft are hardly suitable for our conditions. For example, during the certification of one of Boeing models, the airline was made to reduce the number of possible landings by 10 times because of the abysmal condition of most runways.

What is the way out of this complex situation? First of all - not to buy second-hand foreign airliners. It is necessary to improve programmes for preparing crew and today's approach to training. It is very important to pay particular attention to aircrew cooperation both on the ground and in the air. More attention should be given to high technology in the field of providing air safety. This recommendation requires a lot of funds. But life is something that cannot be economized on.

Thanks for taking the trouble to read and correct this piece of writing!
Hi,

I only had time to look at the first few paragraphs. I've made some changes, so please read carefully.

Overall, this is well written and interesting. You need to learn the phrase 'human error'.

Best wishes, Clive

The curse of the Russian sky or why do planes fall?

July 10 was a day of mourning in Russia. The country mourned for the victims of the Airbus A310 crash in Irkutsk.

It is now impossible to say exactly what caused the catastrophe. However, what happened points to the obvious conlusion that it was 75-80% human error fault rather than an equipment failure. It was people who did not provide the necessary conditions for landing. This, however, does not mean that the tragedy in Irkutsk was due only to Russian disorganization; such a catastrophe could have taken place in any country and involved any aircraft. This is proved by the statistics. Hundreds of planes crash during landing or take-off, claiming the lives of hundreds of passengers in many countries in Asia, Africa, Europe, and America.

What is happening? Experts believe that today's aircraft are designed in such a way that human error is inevitable in an emergency situation. Obviously, no manufacturer can acknowledge the drawbacks and imperfections of their plane, although they are perfectly well aware of such.
I agree with your veiws about aviation. And I want ot just want to say thank you