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These days, Many students are allowed to learn a university not considering their academic ability. I partly agree this point but i believe that education also should rely on people's quality more.

On the other hand, with several reasons why students should admit to a university in spite of the lacking their academic skills.Firstly, Everyone has the right to an education and no one can take this away. Some people choose go to a university while othees choose some others form of training. No matter what form of education a person decide and no one else has the right to make choice for him or her. Besides, there are different university programs designed to fit different kinds of students. Now, there are programsbthat suit to interest and abilities. Because of this, there is no reason to deny a university education to anyone, there is something for everyone who wants it at the university.

On the one hand, in my view, education also have to depend on student's academic ability and i has some reasons. The first Many good university enroll exellent student so they need many student have high quality to develop their school and training talented person. For example, Havard shool where university entrance exam are really competive and thanks to this condition they always top of the best university in the world with many talent. Another reasons, It is very difficult to integrate and word together in an environment of difference in qualitifications. For instance, when everyone do teamwork together not having the same level of academic skills, they probably conflict in their idea or topic building.

Conclusion, everyone should admit to university not considering academic ability but students lack of academic skills also should busy with other activities where they cab thrive themselves to more and more perfect

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You have many errors in your essay. Study subject/verb agreement. Study capitalization.



These days, Many (Many is not a proper noun. Do not capitalize this word.) students are allowed to learn a university (Wrong expression. We learn English. We learn Math. We do not learn a university.) not considering their academic ability. I partly agree this point but i ("i" is not a person. "i" is a letter in the alphabet. Letters do not believe things.) believe that education also should rely on people's quality (That is not the topic. You did not understand the topic of this essay.) more.

On the other hand, (You have used these transition phrases in the wrong order.) with (Wrong expression) several reasons why students should admit to (wrong verb form. You need the passive voice) a university in spite of the lacking their academic skills.Firstly, First, Everyone (Everyone is not a proper noun. Do not capitalize this word.) has the right to an education and no one can take this away. Some people choose go to a university while othees choose some others (wrong form) form of training. No matter what form of education a person decide (wrong form) and no one else has the right to make the choice for him or her. Besides, there are different university programs designed to fit different kinds of students. Now, there are programsbthat suit to interest and abilities. Because of this, there is no reason to deny a university education to anyone, (wrong punctuation. This is a comma splice error. It makes the sentence ungrammatical.) there is something for everyone who wants it at the university.

On the one (You have used these transition phrases in the wrong order.) hand, in my view, education also have (wrong form) to depend on student's academic ability and i (wrong word) has some reasons. The first Many good university (wrong form) enroll exellent student so they need many student have high quality to develop their school and training talented person. For example, Havard shool where the university entrance exam are (wrong form) really competive and thanks to this condition they always top of the best university in the world with many talent. (Wrong grammar.) Another reasons, (wrong form) It is very difficult to integrate and word (wrong word) together in an environment of difference in qualitifications. (I do not understand this point. Your sentence is not good English.) For instance, when everyone do (wrong form) teamwork together not having the same level of academic skills, they probably conflict in their idea (wrong form) or topic building. (not a good phrase)

Conclusion, (wrong expression, In conclusion / To conclude ) everyone should admit (wrong verb form. You need the passive voice) to university not considering academic ability but students lack of academic skills also should busy with other activities (poor English. It makes no sense) where they cab (wrong word) thrive themselves (You cannot use the reflexive form after "thrive.") to more and more perfect (Wrong grammar. Missing punctuation.)

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