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“Facebook is neither good nor bad. It depends on how use it.” This statement I extremely agree. Anything has two sides, advantages and disadvantages, so Facebook also has them.

The first, the disavantages of Facebook. Facebook is really a big social network, it covers up all around the world, so that, the informations that users can give are also so multiform. It has not only the good informations, but also the toxic ones. The users are being exposed this bad informations can make the serious proplems, such as: murders, criminals, …. In addition, using Facebook a lot is also harmful for your health, exspecially, your back and your eyes. Besides, you can contact with not good people on Facebook, it affects your life not well.

The second, the advantages of Facebook. As you know, the users can give a lot of informations from Facebook. Therefore, it has much many the good informations beside the bad ones. Facebook helps you contact with your friends, you can have better life, such as chatting with your friends instead of calling. You aslo can get the advertisement for your job, or about some course you can sign up to have better skills. Moreover, it has a lot of the creators make the contents which are good for yourself, such as: health, doing excersise, beauty, studying, …. And they are all free! That’s great! So that, Facebook has a lot of advantages.

The finally, Facebook is neither good nor bad, it absolutely depends on how use it. You want it’s good, it’s good. But you want it’s bad, it’s bad. In my opinion, no one wants it’s bad, doesn’t it? Therefore, you must plan to discipline yourself. Let’s follow the good informations, the good influencers. You must recognize the informations which you see is good or bad, and then, you can choose to read or not. Exspecially, you should use Facebook less, don’t expends on it too much.

And the last, the person you want to become, it also depends on your action now. So that, let’s do the positive things to have better life and become the best of “you”.

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Topic: “Facebook is neither good or bad. It depends on how use it.” What do you think about the statement? In about 150 words, write a paragraph to express your opinion.

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Write one paragraph
Write 10-15 sentences, for a total of about 150-170 words.

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“Facebook is neither good nor bad. It depends on how use it.(You did not copy this correctly. It is not grammatical English.)

This statement I extremely agree. (Incorrect English. This is the correct sentence: I agree completely with this statement.

Anything has two sides, advantages and disadvantages, so Facebook also has them.

The first, the disavantages of Facebook. (This is not a sentence. It is a noun phrase. )

Facebook is really a big social network, (This is the end of the sentence. The comma is ungrammatical)

it covers up all around the world, so that, the informations that users can give are also so multiform. (It covers the world. Information is non-count. The plural form is not used. "Multiform" is the wrong word. I do not understand what you mean.

It has not only the good informations, but also the toxic ones. The users are being exposed this bad informations can make the serious proplems, such as: murders, criminals, …. In addition, using Facebook a lot is also harmful for your health, exspecially, your back and your eyes. Besides, you can contact with not good people on Facebook, it affects your life not well.

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Thank you a lot for helping me! However, you can see that my skill is not good, I did a lot of mistakes. Therefore can you correct my mistakes more clearly? I'm not sure to recognize my mistakes and correct them well Emotion: sad . And can you grade my paragraph?
Dear.FHowever, you can see that my skill is not good, I did a lot of mistakes.

However, you can see that my writing skills are not good. I made a lot of mistakes.

Do not use a comma between two sentences.

Dear.F I'm not sure to recognize my mistakes and correct them well

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“Facebook is neither good nor bad. It depends on how you use it.” I agree completely with this statement. In my opinion, anything has two sides. They are advantages and disadvantages. Therefore, Facebook also has them. What are the disadvantages and advantages of Facebook? As you know, Facebook is really a big social network. It covers the world. So that, the users can give a lot of kinds of the information. They are good or bad. If you don’t recognize the information which you read are good or bad, you can give serious consequences. With the bad information, it can affect not well of your life, such as: crime, misconception, … However, if you regconize the good information, you can get a lot of advantages. They are good for entertaining, studying, and even your job. Facebook is also a great tools to contact with your friends. Therefore, Facebook is neither good nor bad, it depends completely on you use it. You must recognize which information is good or bad, and then you can choose to read them or not. Moreover, the person you want to become, it also depends on your action now. Let’s do the positive things to have better life.

“Facebook is neither good nor bad. It depends on how you use it.” I agree completely with this statement. In my opinion, everything anything has two sides. They are advantages and disadvantages. Therefore, Facebook also has them. What are the disadvantages and advantages of Facebook? As you know, Facebook is really a really big social network. It covers the world. So that, the Its users can share / contribute a lot of kinds of the information. Some is true and helpful; some is false or harmful. They are good or bad. If you don’t recognize when the information which you read is good and when it is bad, you can suffer give serious consequences. With the bad information, it can affect not well of your life negatively. Someone may steal your money or your identity. such as: crime, misconception, … However, if you regconize the good information, you can get a lot of advantages. They are good for It can be entertaining, help you with schoolwork studying, and even help you to get a promotion at your job. Facebook is also a great way tools to keep in contact with your friends. Therefore, Facebook is neither good nor bad, it depends completely on the way you use it. You must recognize which information is good or bad, and then you can choose to read it them or not. Moreover, the person you want to become, it also depends on your action now. Let’s do the positive things to have better life. (The last sentences do not belong to this topic.)

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