Hi all,

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Fail

Everyone in the class said his experiment failed. They said he failed to prove his theory. The main reason was the inadequately data collecting technique. This failed him to meet between the hypotesis and the conclusion. The fail experiment failed him to get financial support. He was very depressed, furthermore he had spent all his money. This failed him in his major. But he wouldn’t have been very sad if he had known that one investor was interested in his experiment.
BambangHi all,

Would you like to proof read this paragraph ? Thank you.

Fail

Everyone in the class said his experiment failed. They said he failed to prove his theory. The main reason was the inadequately (use an adj.) data collecting technique. This failed him to meet between the hypotesis and the conclusion (don't understand). The fail (use an adj.) experiment failed to get him financial support. He was very depressed, all the more because he had spent all his money. He failed in his major. But he wouldn’t have been very sad if he had known that one investor was interested in his experiment.
Hi julielai,

Thank you. Your comments helped me very much.

Anyway, in that paragraph I wanted to say that the conclusion of an experimental study should confirmed its hypothesis.
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Failure

Everyone in the class concluded that his experiment had failed. They said that he had failed to prove his theory. The main reason was the failure of the data collection equipment. This caused his efforts to fail in trying to confirm the hypothesis from the lab results. The failed experiment made him fail in his attempt to get financial support for his project. He was very depressed more than ever because he had spent all his money. He had failed in his first major experiment. But he wouldn’t have been very sad if he had known that one investor was still interested in his failed yet promising experiment.