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Hi Clive

You answered a couple of my posts earlier; many thanks for that.

I wonder whether you could please cast your eye over this response, and in my other Post, "Similies Part 2 - Adjectives

Please approve my answers to the following similies:

In the following sentences find the adverbs, and add to them fairly long similies:

Example: The soldiers charged madly at the enemy

The soldiers charged at the enemy like a bull careering at a matador

My answers are in red font.

1. The wounded soldier crawled feebly to safety. (like a sealion evading a predator)

2. The train thundered quickly through the tunnel. (like greased lightening)

3. The rain beat furiously on the roof. (like a horse’s hooves cantering on stony ground)

4. The sun blazed strongly on the sands. (like hot air on bricks)

5. The children ran merrily out of school. (cannot think of one here)
6. The oak fell heavily across the metals. (like an elephant jumping onto a car)
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Hi,

2. The train thundered quickly through the tunnel. (like greased lightening)

It seems to me that the primary emphasis here is on noise and the secondary on speed. You haven't included the element of noise.

Perhaps

2. The train thundered quickly through the tunnel. (like a herd of thirsty elephants as soon as the bar opens)

Best wishes, Clive
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Some more thoughts:

1. That's an interesting image; especially as sealions are often the prey of sharks, etc.

2. Likening thunder to lightning may be awkward.

3. Perhaps the simile should include a suggestion of hollowness. Can you think of a non-solid surface, over which a horse's hooves might canter?

4. Likening fire (the sun) to air may not quite work.

5. Perhaps "like a flurry of quavers blown out of a tuba".

6. And yet the elephant is the agent of its fate, while the oak is not. "Like a pole-axed bullock" is sometimes used, in such cases.

All the best,

MrP
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5. The children ran merrily out of school. (like elf soldiers on furlough)
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