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In my opinions, all of old or new fashion is good and have great things. So i'm not agree with your statement. The traditional clothing in the pass was had a luxury and politeness for the person who wear the clothes. And the morden shirts or trousers will be make the people to get a lot of energy, to be a self-starter. In nowadays, there are many ways to choose the suit for you to wear in that day. Maybe in the summer, winter,... Its depend on your temperature cold or hot and i can give you the how to make your style of clothing. To be honest, when i had to participate in important wedding, party, work in the company or meeting the partner i had to suit on the traditional style which give me the growth like a professor not a boy in business. you know, when you're in the event they suit up their vest its really developer than i just have street style that make me feel a little dissapointed to myself which i make a decision to change what i choose to put on.
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In my opinions, all of old or new fashion is good and have great things. (I do not understand your sentence.) So i'm ( Very very bad English.) not agree with your statement. (What is this statement?) The traditional clothing in the pass (Wrong word) was had a luxury (Wrong phrase) and politeness (Wrong word) for the person who wear (Wrong form) the clothes. And the morden shirts or trousers will be make (Wrong form) the people to get a lot of energy, to be a self-starter. In (Wrong word) nowadays, there are many ways to choose the suit for you to wear in that each day. Maybe in the summer, winter,... (Do not use "..." ) Its (Wrong form, no capital letter. ) depend on your (Wrong word) temperature cold or hot and i (Very very bad English. We always use the capital letter.) can give you the how (Wrong word) to make (Wrong word - are you talking about sewing or designing clothes?) your style of clothing. To be honest, when i had to participate in an important wedding, party, work in the company or meeting (Wrong form) the partner i had to suit (Wrong word) on the traditional style which give (Wrong form) me the growth (Wrong word) like a professor not a boy in business. (I have no idea what you mean.) you know, (Wrong expression) when you're in the event they suit up (Wrong word) their vest (Wrong word) its really developer (Wrong word) than i just have street style that make (Wrong form) me feel a little dissapointed to myself which i make a decision to change what i choose to put on.


I do not understand your writing.

You use too many wrong words. You make a lot of grammatical errors.

The word "i" is the 9th letter of the alphabet. It is not a person.